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Jul 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / We can know about ourselves more from animals just by watching them [2]

As we getting more knowledge about human being, people start to be interested in understanding more about animals. I believe observing and studying animals can tell us a lot about human nature. I think we can understand ourselves from animals in two different approaches, direct and indirect.

From some scientific programs on television, which introduce animals' lives, I know more about natural habit we share with different species. For example, I watch television and learn the social structure of sliverback, a chimpanzee which has silver back. The sliverback maintain his power in the whole family by attacking and banishing mature male chimpanzees. That reminds me an ancient tyrant in China who murdered his brothers for mounting the throne. I realized directly human and animals sometimes are common in a cruel way.

In addition to cruel way, I had some experiences in more positive and indirect viewpoint. I was a volunteer in a school, where young criminal are sent after they are sentenced. The school designed a course, which is primitively about taking care of homeless animals, in order to help those kids get back to normal lives and teach them some virtue to live by. In the beginning, I was a little bit scary of interacting with those kids. However, not until the day did I find the warm sight reflecting from the eyes of a kid, while he washing and playing with a dog. Suddenly, I understand that those kids are just like you and me, though they did have made some mistakes. Again, I see the bright side of human nature from observing animals' interaction with people in a indirect way.

Observing animals can tell us a lot of information about human nature is for sure. For me, I learn a lot from observing animals. I see the dark side and the bright side both. So I agree with it.
csv8674xn   
Jul 28, 2011
Writing Feedback / Japan: special interest/passion+ how you have developed knowledge in these area? [7]

Here is some suggestions for you.

First sentence can be simpler which result in a stronger beginning.

You can try adding more details in the second paragraph. It may help the paragraph be more impressive.

Also, to introduce life-changing masterpieces to all over the world the world

I will continue to introduce Japanese music all overto the world while studing in college and thereafter.

By the way, I'm also a big fan of Japanese music. So, thanks for your translation!
csv8674xn   
Jul 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / Watching movies in a theater is more fun than watching them at home. [5]

Nowadays, seeing movies has become a major entertainment in our daliy life, which leads to the question "How to obtain more fun from seeing movies? " In my point of view, seeing movie in the theater please me the most. That is because movie in the theater is usually the newest and theaters always provide the best sound effects compared to those in the house.

Usually, DVDs of movies are released after movies in the theater did. We can ,therefore, see those movies earlier than those who watching at home. Moreover, seeing movies in the theater gives me the hottest topic when I talk to my friends. By contrast, I may not follow the conversations between my friends, while they talking about the newest films.

Also, the sound effect in the theater is always much better than those in your house. Take my devices for example. They are not equipped with top technology. In fact I bought it couple years ago, all of which are too old to use from todays perspetive. However, updating the devices cost so much. Because of money, We cannot always keep the device such as amplifier, to be the newest. On the other hand, by spending few dollars in the theater, I can have a enjoyable afternoon time.

Clearly, seeing movies in the theater brings more convenience. Not only can you obtain newest information about films, but also keep you apart from being no idea about what your friend talking about when they are having a conversation about new movies. Last not least, It's cheap. Every one can enjoy the best sound effect by little cost instead of spending lots of money on the device in your house.

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