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Fiona_82075   
Aug 4, 2011
Writing Feedback / a single international language or not?------IELTS Practice [4]

any contributor could help me with this question? Thank you:) a friend of mine thought my argument in the 4th paragraph is off the thesis" this would make it difficult to maintain the identity of cultures", what do you think?
Fiona_82075   
Aug 4, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS--Solve traffic and housing problems by moving companies to the rural areas? [3]

Traffic and housing problems in major cities would be solved by moving big companies, factories and their employees to the rural area. Do you agree or disagree?

With the booming development of some cosmopolitan metropolises in recent years, an increasing number of people are flooding into these major cities, raising such urban problems as traffic jams or housing shortage. In such cases, some people think an effective way to tackle these problems is to relocate big firms, factories and their employees in cities to the countryside. However, from my perspective, I suppose this suggestion is not advisable, for it cannot alter the situation essentially and instead it may give rise to new concerns in rural areas.

Admittedly, moving big companies, factories and their employees to the rural area can help ease traffic congestion and housing scarcity. As people work in the countryside, they will not have to commute in cities at peak times such as eight o'clock in the morning or six o'clock in the afternoon. Consequently, urban traffic jam can be, to some extent, relieved in this respect. On the other hand, the relocation of companies and factories in cities may leave more space to build new residential areas, thus alleviating the urban housing crisis at present.

However, the proposed measure is not fundamental to resolve urban traffic and housing problems. This is because some employees are reluctant to live in the rural areas only due to the relocation of their workplaces. This can be best illustrated with the example of the married workers. Taking into the growth of their children into consideration, the married workers may believe the educational resources in cities are far superior to ones in the countryside, and because of this, they probably opt for living in the cities. Thus, these employers have to commute between the cities and the countryside, which is ineffective in tackling traffic and housing problems. What is worse, the workers have to consume more time and traffic fees.

Also, the suggested step can bring about environmental problems in the rural areas. As companies and factories move to the countryside, they may deplete the local natural resources as the raw materials for production. Besides, the untreated pollutants the plants discharge can be damaging to the rural environment .Therefore, moving companies, factories and employees to the rural areas can ruin the environment there.

Overall, I would conclude that relocating big firms, factories and their employees is not sensible to address urban traffic and housing problems. Instead, the government should be forward-looking, resolving the problems within the cities.
Fiona_82075   
Aug 4, 2011
Writing Feedback / Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia [3]

idea of learning is vary between the people varies
Some people think language skills can be improve by regular leaning than the other people say the skills can be improve by regular use. while improved

language is a must for better communication.
English is a universal language that widely spoken in the world
It is aan important language of commerce,
To sum up, English is a language that is fairly easy to learn compared towith with other languages.
Fiona_82075   
Aug 3, 2011
Writing Feedback / a single international language or not?------IELTS Practice [4]

Isai

Thanks for your valuable advice. I'll check the website.
You mean the linking devices in my 2rd paragraph are weak? Could you point them out to me so that I could improve them in my essays.

A friend of mine thought my argument in the 4th paragragh is off the thesis" this would make it difficult to maintain the identity of cultures", what do you think?

Best wishes:)
Fiona_82075   
Aug 3, 2011
Writing Feedback / follow fashion trends or dress in personal style?----IELTS practice [5]

isai
Hi,isai. Thanks!

Furthermore, people with inadequate aesthetic knowledge or poor originality develop their own senses of fashion when treasuring the latest fashion information. Without following fashion trends, such people would have a hard time choosing and matching clothes, let alone forming their own dressing styles. ( lack or elobration)

You mean i need to explain my argument more clearly? I find it a little difficult to explain more. Could you help me with it? Or do you find this argument is a little off the topic?
Fiona_82075   
Aug 2, 2011
Writing Feedback / a single international language or not?------IELTS Practice [4]

Some people believe that there should be a single international language. Others believe that this would make it difficult to maintain the identity of cultures. What's your opinion?

The 21st century has witnessed the sweeping trends of globalization, which raises people's concerns about whether a single international language should be a necessity or not. From my perspective, a universal language playing the dominant role in the international community is of vital significance to global people.

It is especially true if we consider the fact that a single international language plays a pivotal role in global economic cooperation. As businessmen from different countries have access to the same language, they can communicate with each other more efficiently and deeply on trade, which can intensify the transnational cooperation. In contrast, without the availability of the same language, there might be a chance that misunderstanding and conflicts would ensue over business negotiations, impeding collaborations between them. Therefore, a single international language serves an economic purpose.

Also, a universal language is an integral part of cultural communication and interactions. If people are equipped with a single international language, they can tell each other smoothly about their countries' specific cultures such as the traditional customs or the modern lifestyles, which enables people to expand their outlooks, viewing the world in new angles. For example, when people travel to foreign countries, the local people can introduce the tourist attractions to such people with the command of the universal language, helping foreign visitors have an enjoyable exotic experience.

In spite of this, the disadvantages of the promotion of a universal language cannot be denied. To be more specific, a single international language may, to some extent, erode the cultural identity of a nation. This is because people may be impressed by the cultural values brought with the universal language, eroding a sense of national belong. For instance, some Asians are seeking individualism, previously denied by many Asian countries, due to the fact that they have gradually identified with such values expressed in American movies, which are imported by the governments as a result of the proliferation of English.

Therefore, I would conclude that a single international language contributes to global community in terms of economic and cultural communication. On the other hand, every country should by no means disregard the preservation of their own cultural heritage.
Fiona_82075   
Aug 2, 2011
Writing Feedback / follow fashion trends or dress in personal style?----IELTS practice [5]

Thank you~~
Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it is believed that they primarily just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we should not follow them and that we should dress in what we like. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With increasing availability to the Internet, people can collect a wealth of information about the latest fashion trends over the world, such as the most popular shoes style this season or the best-liked clothes color this year. However, some people think that dressing in a personal style should be advocated rather than following fashion trends. From my perspective, fashion trends have a more essential role to play in people's lives than personal dressing styles.

This is because following fashion trends enables people to keep up with the world's latest transformations, which is of vital importance if we consider the fact that people are living in a global village today. When individuals keep the habit of grasping the world's cutting-edge fashion information, they are gradually changing their attitudes to viewing the world, which means they are more open to accept diverse voices from people around the world. In contrast, if they stuck to their own fashion styles, disregarding the world's top fashion designers' achievements, they would stay conservative in their own worlds. As a result, they might fall behind shortly.

Furthermore, people with inadequate aesthetic knowledge or poor originality develop their own senses of fashion when treasuring the latest fashion information. Without following fashion trends, such people would have a hard time choosing and matching clothes, let alone forming their own dressing styles.

Despite this, it is undeniable that following fashion trends constantly may undermine individuals' personalities. Individuals purchase their clothes according to the latest fashion trends, which may result in the phenomenon that people would wear the same style of clothes .Consequently, the world would look monotonous.

With those arguments in mind, I would conclude that people should, especially for ones lacking basic aesthetic knowledge, care more about fashion trends in lives as they can keep pace with the world's changes. On the other hand, creative design talents can value their own dressing ideas, developing their own fashion styles as they like.
Fiona_82075   
Aug 2, 2011
Student Talk / Hi everyone! Welcome at EssayForum thread. [370]

Hi! everyone:) I'm from China and I'm a third year college student. Actually I'm preparing for IELTS as i wanna apply for universities in Britain to get a master's degree. Nice to meet you all here. I'll keep practicing and post my essays here. I'd appreciate your advice:)