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vgrommes   
Nov 7, 2011
Essays / I need to write a personal letter to my son in essay format [5]

this my final letter . Can someone please review it and let me know anything would be help.
Wow! Time sure goes by fast; it seems like only yesterday when you used to run around in diapers. Oh, those days sure had me cracking up. I can't believe it, six more years till you graduate from high school. As your mother, who dearly loves you a lot, and wants the best for you is why I've wrote this letter to you. It's about your education and your future plans. I know it's been very challenging for you, every year. You're probably wondering why you should continue on with your education. Son, if you're wondering what you should do next consider furthering your education or work skills that will come in handy later in life.

The start of college is very exciting but also very overwhelming with the variety of classes. I would like you to really think of college as your choice to continue on with your education. I need you to know that going into college is fun, yet it's a new beginning to another life that stands between you and what will become of you. This is why, choosing wisely, which classes you will enroll is very important. It will guide you to become a productive person throughout the rest of your life. As indicated, in a story I have read by the Author Jeffrey Hart, "An ordinary course is one that has always been taken and obviously should be taken "(339). You should prioritize primary classes so you get your moneys worth and earn a successful education. According to Jeffrey Hart, these are some classes: "American and European history, introduction to philosophy, American and European literature, the Old and New Testaments and one modern language (340)." Marc before you can move to other advanced courses you must understand these ordinary courses, as Hart suggested, in his story. Following these suggestions will help you advance on to other courses and fully understand.

Another, way to go about your educational plans is to attend a short term vocational school. If you wish to work after you graduate from high school, than a vocational school is the right place for you. You will master work related skills but will not earn a master's degree or PHD degree. With these skills you will be able to prove to employers what you will bring to their company even though you did not receive a college degree. You can still be hired with or without a degree as long as you're capable of doing your job description. This is why receiving some type of formal vocational school training shows what values you will bring to their company (Murray 399)." After all, having a degree is not necessary what does matters to employers is that a person can do a fantastic job.

Good things to know about vocational school are its short term and a high IQ score is not required. Either way you decide to go you will be able to make a living and find a reasonable job.

Education should be very important aspect in everyone's life. Many would say education shows how a person learns and what they will become of themselves. Understanding, why and what is all part of learning. Learning is an every day process in order to keep up you must be dedicated and motivated. After reading these stories, it's made me realize you don't have to be very smart. You're still capable of learning and moving forward with your life. As long as you can comprehend some knowledge is the key to learning.

After reading this letter, I hope you will take my advice about your future educational plans. I know it must be difficult to decide what to do. Marc, choose a good path for yourself although you might think of putting college off for a later time it's not the best choice. I would recommend you to go to college after you graduate so you don't forget what you have learned. Education, Son, is very important. Don't ever give up; after all, you are my one and only son. I must give you the best advice to follow. Son, I will always be here to support you. Have faith in your self, and I love you a lot. Hope these last few words of inspiration will lead you to positive thoughts and you will choose wisely what to do with your bright future in the coming years.

Sincerely,
vgrommes   
Oct 21, 2011
Undergraduate / "I have a dream" - NYU elaborate on an academic area of interest [2]

on you first sentence you should change do not to don't.

change dream , to goal on second sentence

change this sentence
Science had meant a great deal for me since I was a little girl.

Growing up science meant alot to me as a little girl

revise your last sentenc its confuse . i think it should be two sentences
vgrommes   
Oct 21, 2011
Essays / I need to write a personal letter to my son in essay format [5]

I need to write a letter for my english class. I don't know how to start it - or write it in the form of a letter. So i did tried but not sure if this will work below are some directions of what my teacher want me to include

is more informative with running commentaryI

should include
1. intro paragraph where i establish rapport with the reader.I can add a personal touch to this portion of the essay /letter. overall i still need to grab the attention of the reader.

dierct quotes and commentary as needed

towards the end ot the letter i should articulate a personal philsophy in whole or part on what i think is important in acquiring a satisfying and personally rewwarding college education that honors academics learning and key cultural influences. this concluding part of the letter should contain your distilled nuggets of wisdom that you can share with your reader

so far I have wrote this

Dear son:

Dear Son :

Congratulation and graduating high school.
Wow! Time sure goes by fast; seems like it was just yesterday. I remember this day you were born, December 28, 1999, at 2:05 pm, in the afternoon. What a great joy this day was seeing everyone welcoming you to the Anderson family. As every year goes by, and you get older I look forward to seeing you become an adult, and go off to college. This why I'm writing to you my son .

so far thats all i got .
vgrommes   
Oct 18, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'Which Way to Go' - my reflective essay [3]

Which Way to Go

What possibly could be the dramatic increase per year of Hispanic families being torn apart? What justifies a parent to leave a human life behind? Why risk what they have created and leave as if there was a pot of gold in another country waiting for them to become rich and wealthy. In the devastating true story of Enrique's Journey, author Sonia Nazario writes about a young boy name Enrique who is desperate to find his mother in the United States. What would trigger Hispanic people to leave their homeland and start a new life in an unknown land?

As a result of Mexico's 1910 revolution, there has been an increase in poverty and corrupted government. An increase of jobs during World War I and II took a dramatic affect in the United States, signing the Bracero Treaty. The United States reopened the floodgates for legal immigration workers, so they could work. The lure of jobs in the United States compare to Mexico's enforces deprived people to invade the United States. Persuades me to believe Hispanic people were on the search for a better life. Families that lived this inhumane and cruelty way definitely must have been very unhealthy.

Explains, why America is known as a country for a better opportunity for survival, freedom, and jobs to work. In my opinion, it is not the best choice to make when choosing where to live. It should be a place you plan to reside, value its property and feel safe at home. A home to me is not homely without one or both parents in the same household to raise their children. Perhaps that is the reason why Hispanic families are separated, and children are raised by their relatives.

It is so heartless and selfish a mother would have the courage to move to another country and abandon their children. This is why Enrique becomes distant from his mother, and the relationship they once had has gradually shattered. The move to another country and abandoning their children is a negative approach because it destroys families' relationships. Children who lack these needs look else where to replace the missing love. They soon realize there is nobody that can replace their parents love. Growing up without your parents plays a significant effect on a child's life throughout childhood and until adulthood. As a mother of two, I can not imagine how I could go on with life without my children. I would not be able to function correctly on a daily base. Eventually it would lead me to an emotional wreck of sadness and depression. These feelings of remorse would arise, as though, I had committed a crime of hatred. Everyday would be so difficult to see parents and children interacting with each other out in the public. I would confined myself from the public and become my own hostage, in my home. What is the best rout for a parent to support their family?

The best way to respond is to think before I give my opinion. My views of life have changed dramatically. I'm able to approach parents and not have the urge to speculate or think negative. I'm convinced parents have their reasons why they go to America. They try to financially support their children, so they can have food to eat and live. Why they go this rout and not stay where they are? What they look for is survival,

to provide for their children no matter the pain, hard work and the time it takes. The actions parents do for their children to survive are very interesting to me even if others disagree. These stories have visually helped me to recognize the good or bad and how tempting it is to do what you want. And to never give up despite what others think. I have learned that it's okay to state my opinion but not to expect everyone to agree with me. What matters to me is what I believe in. It also motivates me to keep going every day.
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