ginger3694
Oct 20, 2011
Undergraduate / 'inspired with my own dealings with pain' - Cornell supplement (CALS) [5]
It does! I'll be sure to work those suggestions in some how.
It does! I'll be sure to work those suggestions in some how.
ginger3694
Oct 20, 2011
Undergraduate / 'inspired with my own dealings with pain' - Cornell supplement (CALS) [5]
Ok here's the updated essay, ideas to improve?:
While most high school students have become inspired after watching a loved one suffer, I have been inspired with my own dealings with pain. Chronic migraines, according to a report done by the Migraine Research Foundations, affect about 2% for the U.S. population. Being part of that 2% has inspired me to study biology, and eventually medicine.
I have always had a high tolerance for pain, and a daily pain has been no exception. However, while most of my friends were relaxing after school, I spent a good portion of my high school years visiting different doctors. What started out with one doctor, soon turned into several. With every doctor I saw came new medications to try, new therapies, and the same speech about my menstrual cycle. However, which each new treatment came no relief or another health problem. This in turned led me to new doctors. Eventually, each doctor has given me the same answer, consisting of "I don't know why you are suffering so much" and "I don't know what else to do". Walking out of each of those appointments, I have told my mom that if they can't figure out what to do with me, then I will figure it out myself.
With each day of pain, I push myself even more to fulfill my desire to study biology and medicine, not only to help myself, but every other person who suffers. In order to achieve this goal, I believe that the College of Agricultural and Life Sciences at Cornell University is the perfect place for me to develop and purse my goals.
Ok here's the updated essay, ideas to improve?:
While most high school students have become inspired after watching a loved one suffer, I have been inspired with my own dealings with pain. Chronic migraines, according to a report done by the Migraine Research Foundations, affect about 2% for the U.S. population. Being part of that 2% has inspired me to study biology, and eventually medicine.
I have always had a high tolerance for pain, and a daily pain has been no exception. However, while most of my friends were relaxing after school, I spent a good portion of my high school years visiting different doctors. What started out with one doctor, soon turned into several. With every doctor I saw came new medications to try, new therapies, and the same speech about my menstrual cycle. However, which each new treatment came no relief or another health problem. This in turned led me to new doctors. Eventually, each doctor has given me the same answer, consisting of "I don't know why you are suffering so much" and "I don't know what else to do". Walking out of each of those appointments, I have told my mom that if they can't figure out what to do with me, then I will figure it out myself.
With each day of pain, I push myself even more to fulfill my desire to study biology and medicine, not only to help myself, but every other person who suffers. In order to achieve this goal, I believe that the College of Agricultural and Life Sciences at Cornell University is the perfect place for me to develop and purse my goals.
ginger3694
Oct 20, 2011
Undergraduate / 'inspired with my own dealings with pain' - Cornell supplement (CALS) [5]
I'm having a bit of trouble starting my supplement essay for CALS. The question is how have your interests and related experiences influenced your selection of major?
So far I have this, but I'm not even sure if this would make a good essay
While most high school students have become inspired after watching a loved one suffer, I have been inspired with my own dealings with pain. Chronic migraines, according to a report done by the Migraine Research Foundations, affect about 2% for the U.S. population. Being part of that 2% has inspired me to study biology.
I'm having a bit of trouble starting my supplement essay for CALS. The question is how have your interests and related experiences influenced your selection of major?
So far I have this, but I'm not even sure if this would make a good essay
While most high school students have become inspired after watching a loved one suffer, I have been inspired with my own dealings with pain. Chronic migraines, according to a report done by the Migraine Research Foundations, affect about 2% for the U.S. population. Being part of that 2% has inspired me to study biology.