epd101
Oct 25, 2011
Undergraduate / "major in unafraid"- this is my BARNARD essay [2]
The content is great! I really like how it conveys it's message on a personal level!
Just a few technical errors I noticed:
"thing" in the second line should be changed to "things" because so your verbs and nouns agree.
"It hasn't been a day where I had" should be "There hasn't been a day where I had"
Formal essays should not have conjunctions in them such as "it's" and "hasn't". It is better to just say "it is" or "has not".
The "whether it is a math problem" might sound better with "whether it be a math problem"
Great essay, and good luck!
The content is great! I really like how it conveys it's message on a personal level!
Just a few technical errors I noticed:
"thing" in the second line should be changed to "things" because so your verbs and nouns agree.
"It hasn't been a day where I had" should be "There hasn't been a day where I had"
Formal essays should not have conjunctions in them such as "it's" and "hasn't". It is better to just say "it is" or "has not".
The "whether it is a math problem" might sound better with "whether it be a math problem"
Great essay, and good luck!