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Posts by KymberlyAlexis
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KymberlyAlexis   
Oct 27, 2011
Undergraduate / STANFORD ESSAYS: PARALLEL UNIVERSES AND LETTER TO ROOMMATE [5]

Essay 1 - A little bit too much information and not enough about you? I think you should put more about yourself and how learning about these things affected you, not so much about the actual information itself. Stanford is going to get a lot of essays on that sort of information, they want to know what you as an individual did or learned or changed because of it.

Essay 2 - Very good. A lot of personal information and all put together quite nicely.

Not really any grammatical or spelling errors, and all in all nicely done! I hope you get in!
P.S. XC, our sport is your sport's punishment! ;)
KymberlyAlexis   
Oct 27, 2011
Undergraduate / 'The duality of ideas' - Stanford Supplement Essays [4]

Essay 1 - I take it structure is what matters to you? In my opinion I don't think it quite answers the prompt, but if you reworded your opening to say that what matters to you most is structure in your life or something along those lines and shifted the rest of the passage accordingly it would work out.

Essay 2 - Seems to have a very personal voice, I don't know you but if I did I would probably say that it sounds just like you.

Didn't see any grammatical or spelling errors, so overall good essays.
KymberlyAlexis   
Oct 27, 2011
Undergraduate / 'you'll be my first' - Stanford Supplement B. - Dear Roommate [5]

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.

Dear roomie,

I hope you are as thrilled as I am to be roommates! I know that over the course of this next year we will learn everything there is to know about each other, but before the time of our lives begins I thought I would share with you some tidbits about myself.

First off, I love danger. Be it bridge jumping, zip lining, rock climbing, speeding on skis/snowboards/bikes/cars/boats, petting poisonous creatures - if there's adventure to be had I want to be a part of it. Needless to say I'm a big fan of the outdoors, and from growing up in extreme Texan temperatures it will take a lot more than a little heat to keep me from going outside. Sports have been a huge part of my life growing up, so if you're ever in the mood for a pick-up game of, well anything really, I would love to participate.

The second thing you should know about me is that while I am active and outdoorsy I'm also a bit of a nerd. I love gaming. It doesn't matter if it's a board game or on some gaming system, as long as it's a decent game I'm bound to enjoy playing it. I also enjoy curling up in my hammock to read in my spare time, but unfortunately that doesn't happen very often.

I'm not a night owl, but I'm also not an early bird either. I'm usually quite organized, and I'm a little bit on the OCD side. Depending on my mood I can be loud and enthusiastic or quiet and thoughtful. My kind of Friday night could either involve an evening out with friends or an evening in with myself, popcorn, and a good movie.

Now I have a confession to make. Since I've grown up as an only child the only experiences I've had with a roommate were during camp, which was at most a week long. So really you'll be my first! I hope that doesn't worry you, because I promise you will love living with me for the next year or more.

Until then,
Alexi

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