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Nov 18, 2011

Writing Feedback / 【IELTS】Childcare is an important task for nations. [3]

you need revise some sentences and used other terms for some word in your essay

like for example: fathers and mothers - parents
childcare training - organization/program/institution

iii_atsied

Nov 18, 2011

Writing Feedback / The Power of Psychology - mandatory course at your college? [3]

As a fifteen year old boy,I experience feeling of despair, anxiety and fear. (Due to a congenital condition called Pectus Excavatum my chest was sinking in and my life changed.)--- You can revised this sentence, and used other term aside from SINKING.

In order to be successful, we need to be accountable for our own behavior, learn from our mistakes and move forward.

Hope I abled to help you.

iii_atsied

Nov 11, 2011

Writing Feedback / 'television is nothing more than entertainment' - SAMPLE QUESTION FROM IELTS [NEW]

Some people believe that television is a powerful educational tool. Other people believe that television is nothing more than entertainment and should be discouraged.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, watching television programs is very popular all over the world. It was the source of information and also with for entertainment purposes. In this essay I will discuss some of the advantages and disadvantages of watching television.

Most people spend their free time in watching television, they are informed on latest trends within their country and all over the world. Children also able to learn a lot, from educational program like for example the national geographic and discovery. Facts gathered from television could help in office and school research or presentation.

Furthermore, television is also for entertainment value where adult allocate their time in drama and comedy program, while children love to watch cartoons channel. It media captures viewers attention because it finds the show enjoyable or has a moral values.

To sum up, television is become part of humans life whether it is for learning or for entertainment purposes it is must not be discouraged, because it ads in color of life.