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Posts by sami talib [Suspended]
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sami talib   
Nov 26, 2011
Writing Feedback / IELTS --- Should we follow fashion trends or not? [3]

the increasingly amounts of clothing advertisement....the increase in number of colthing advertisement or... a lot of advertisements for clothing
fashion trends is going to be an essential...fashion trends are going to be
simply follow it ...simply follow the fashion or trend
deciding to follow any popular trends ....trend
In other words, it is people themselves instead of designers...there are people themselves or they are the people
one ignores this important truth .... ignores this aspect
Further....moreover or furthermore is more appropriate word
theatre ....theater
They only need to prepare several popular clothing for particular ...it doesn't seem to be appropriate...they only need to wear trendy clothes or....they can follow the fashion on some occasions

you mentioned megastars( celebrities would be fine) in conclusion....first you should mention some points about celebrities in opinion paragraph
overall you have used relevant examples.
sami talib   
Nov 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / Toefl Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully [3]

Toefl Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully. Others choose not to make plans at all for free time. What do you prefer planning or not planning for your leisure time? Use specific reason to support your answer.

Most people think that weekend or free time is a time of leisure after doing planned work and following a schedule whole week, so the purpose is to take rest without bothering about any planning. Owing to take the full advantage of my free time I, however, prefer to plan my weekend. By scheduling my free time, I avoid wasting my time and take care of my family, friends and sleep.

Acknowledging the need of having some free time, for a fresh start, I always make plans for it. If I want to play golf and meet a friend, but I don't schedule my time for awake up, and taking breakfast then I might miss an important meeting with some friend or community golf game on weekend. Being a family man, I am accustomed of spending some time with my family that can only be possible if I schedule my time in such a way that I can meet my friends, as well as have a dinner with my family.

People mostly spend the whole week or do their job according to a schedule. People, who do not have a plan for their leisure work, are usually late for their work or unable to accomplish the assigned task. Students can miss preparation for the test or quiz since they play without planning.

My body rhythm doesn't allow me to work without plan. I sleep at time, but if I stayed awake and watch movies, without planning, late at night on weekend, I wouldn't be able to get up on time the next morning. I can ruin my Monday, the first day of a week, after getting to the work late and by feeling drowsiness the rest of the day.

World is moving in a fast pace and getting some free time in such a mechanized life is blissful. I always prefer to plan my free time in such a way that I can be able to have some rest, as well as enjoy with my friends and relatives.
sami talib   
Nov 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'save money to buy luxury items' - TOEFL Essay [5]

@ nomid...It is very hard for a person to get money from their friend...correct it as... it might be hard for a person to borrow some money from a friend/his friend.

examples are relevant
@ depa...he had habit to save money right from his childhood...write it as....he was accustomed of saving money
he had some much money that took a nice sweater for his mother birthday...he had enough money to buy a nice sweater
overall good essay
sami talib   
Nov 23, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'man is a social animal' - Toefl spend your time alone of with friends? [3]

Toefl Do you prefer to spend your time alone of with friends? Use specific reason to support your answer.

In a day a person has to spend most of his time with others while attending the school, doing a job or at a house with family. When it comes to spending your spare time, then, you have a choice. Being with my friends makes me happy, I forget about my problems and they have positive effect on my personality so I prefer to spend my time with my friends.

People say that man is a social animal, and I am in complete accord with that. I can't stand with sitting in a room, or watch some movie alone. If I do so I get bored. However, with my friends I laugh a lot even at simple gags. After rigorous work of whole week, I want to go for outing on weekend and in order to cherish the holiday I need my friends who make even a simple journey a memorable tour.

Most people have to face hardships and dilemmas in their lives. During such situations, when you are already coping up with your woes and regrets alone, you really need some friend to conciliate our pain. Only a friend, with whom I shared moments of respite, can put him in my shoes and can console me.

Living with friends makes you hospitable and you learn how you can be nice when you meet another person. You can get along with others, despite your differences. You like to live with people and if it happens to go to an unfamiliar place, you can easily make friends who can act as medicine for homesickness.

Some people might like living alone. I, however, find peace and happiness in company of my friends. They take my mind off the stresses, cheer me up and always there whenever I need them.
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