wilsy
Nov 26, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Travel or living experiences in other countries ' - Harvard optional essay [10]
thanks :) yeah i tend to make a lot of simple mistakes
thanks :) yeah i tend to make a lot of simple mistakes
wilsy
Nov 26, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Small things have the potential to create an impact' - OSU Honors [3]
hi :)
Try to avoid contraction words when it comes to formal writing.
hi :)
Try to avoid contraction words when it comes to formal writing.
wilsy
Nov 26, 2011
Undergraduate / 'excellent arts program' - personal statement for VCU [2]
Hi :)
Try to avoid contraction words when you are doing formal writing.
overall it is really good
Hi :)
Try to avoid contraction words when you are doing formal writing.
overall it is really good
wilsy
Nov 26, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Travel or living experiences in other countries ' - Harvard optional essay [10]
Prompt:Travel or living experiences in other countries
To some, if not many, Germany is considered the problem child of Europe because of the thirst for power and expansion abroad during the 1900's. For me Germany is the place where I was born, the place in which I spent the first two years of my life. I was only a baby went I left Europe and know as a young adult I crave to understand and observe where I was born. Before leaving to Germany so many people told me that I had to be careful, for Nazis may still exist. As a baby I didn't not know anything about German history, but after many world history classes I had a basic knowledge of what happened.
As I wait for the plane to take off I realized that I am scared, for it is a long ride and I was alone. My dad was waiting for me in Germany. I did not know what to except, for I was a baby and I did not remember anything. When the plane landed and I took a look at the landscape, memories of my childhood came back to life. Playing in the strawberries fields running through the sunflowers fields, everything came back as if it had never banished from my mind. How could I have been so scared? The answer is simple, after reading so much of World War one and two, we created a stereotype. We cannot base our thoughts of someone from where they were born or raised.
Even if I was only born there, with no German heritage, I feel as if I belong there. The climate was wonderful. It was cold on December but hot on summer; just what everybody needs. Not to mention that the people are so kind. Kids are running or riding their bikes, mothers are laughing, while fathers are working. All off this I observed while walking down the streets with an ice cream cone in my hand. Another thing that I loved of Germany is that they are really trying to make a change, and save the world. They don't use that mush vehicles, they think bicycle are better. Not only for the environment, but for them; it keeps them on shape.
Now last but not least the houses were my favorites. They are beyond doubt a piece of art, so cozy and peaceful. The attic so big that it could become a room, the rooms are so bright that you feel as if you are outside. Germany is beautiful in all aspects, and because of fear I may not been able to enjoy my trip to Germany. I decided to put it aside, for we cannot judge people for the mistakes that their ancestors made.
Prompt:Travel or living experiences in other countries
To some, if not many, Germany is considered the problem child of Europe because of the thirst for power and expansion abroad during the 1900's. For me Germany is the place where I was born, the place in which I spent the first two years of my life. I was only a baby went I left Europe and know as a young adult I crave to understand and observe where I was born. Before leaving to Germany so many people told me that I had to be careful, for Nazis may still exist. As a baby I didn't not know anything about German history, but after many world history classes I had a basic knowledge of what happened.
As I wait for the plane to take off I realized that I am scared, for it is a long ride and I was alone. My dad was waiting for me in Germany. I did not know what to except, for I was a baby and I did not remember anything. When the plane landed and I took a look at the landscape, memories of my childhood came back to life. Playing in the strawberries fields running through the sunflowers fields, everything came back as if it had never banished from my mind. How could I have been so scared? The answer is simple, after reading so much of World War one and two, we created a stereotype. We cannot base our thoughts of someone from where they were born or raised.
Even if I was only born there, with no German heritage, I feel as if I belong there. The climate was wonderful. It was cold on December but hot on summer; just what everybody needs. Not to mention that the people are so kind. Kids are running or riding their bikes, mothers are laughing, while fathers are working. All off this I observed while walking down the streets with an ice cream cone in my hand. Another thing that I loved of Germany is that they are really trying to make a change, and save the world. They don't use that mush vehicles, they think bicycle are better. Not only for the environment, but for them; it keeps them on shape.
Now last but not least the houses were my favorites. They are beyond doubt a piece of art, so cozy and peaceful. The attic so big that it could become a room, the rooms are so bright that you feel as if you are outside. Germany is beautiful in all aspects, and because of fear I may not been able to enjoy my trip to Germany. I decided to put it aside, for we cannot judge people for the mistakes that their ancestors made.