lauradoodle
Nov 27, 2011
Undergraduate / 'ASB President' - extracurricular activities or work experience [2]
This is definitely a good start. However, I think you should maybe use more descriptive language to make it more engaging. Right now, it seems like it is more of a list of what you did, not how you felt about it or what you learned and how you grew or changed as a person, which is really what you want to highlight. You say you are learning what it takes to be a great leader, but what exactly does it take? There is a little too much vague language, but with a little more work...it will be spot on! Good luck!
This is definitely a good start. However, I think you should maybe use more descriptive language to make it more engaging. Right now, it seems like it is more of a list of what you did, not how you felt about it or what you learned and how you grew or changed as a person, which is really what you want to highlight. You say you are learning what it takes to be a great leader, but what exactly does it take? There is a little too much vague language, but with a little more work...it will be spot on! Good luck!
