Undergraduate / "The Sophistic Poet" -University of Washington - Short Response Q.2 [4]

First time posting, but this is what I think:

Don't think you emphasized enough on what the question is asking- "How would you contribute to this community?"

1. I understand your intention in the 'poem' paragraph (I write poems too), but it doesn't tell much.
Maybe emphasis on the process of writing, e.g:
What things (in daily life) inspire you to write certain themes or types of poem?
How has it increased or changed your viewpoint or perspectives?

2. how has living in different places, your passion for poem and debate link together?
Perhaps have a concluding paragraph that links these three things.

3. It's only 350 - 500 words, the first and last paragraph is unnecessary (like what emanon said)

4. Most importantly, back to what I first stated- EXPLAIN - "How would you contribute to this community?"

I don't know if I'm correct or if I helped at all, but this is my opinion.