Writing Feedback / IELTS essay if children should be sent to school at an early age? [6]

As I understand, you should reorganize structure and make it clear.
Regards
Tracy

Undergraduate / 'my father has been working in China' - someone who has made an impact on your life [3]

Hi, I admire you and respect your father when I read the article. As I understand, maybe this is the way your father explain his love. Your father is a person who take shoulder for the whole family to building a better environment. He takes all his time to focus on working and be an example for others, I believe his sprit influence on you as well. THis is the reason why he has to sacrifice the time with you. I thought you understand your fathers' situation and tried to keep touch with him. Sometimes maybe ring a call or leave a message about what you want to talk to him. Perhaps the relationship between you two will back soonx. I wish you the best!