slythr
Jan 9, 2012
Undergraduate / 'to pursue a human undertaking' - Georgetown significant activity essay [8]
might be too late, but i do see one thing that i would change if i were you.
You should add a wrapping sentence at the end to sum up why this whole experience was significant to you. this sentence if you choose to add it will tie everything back to the prompt and make it much easier for the reader to find the significance the activity had on you--I, for one, had trouble finding it when i skimmed through it very quickly.
Remember this essay is about you not about the water project.
the essay for the most part is very good, but it seems that by the last para you lost focus. instead of getting back to the topic--the significance the activity had on you--the focus remained on the water project and its significance.
Make this one change and your essay will be perfect!
Good luck to you!! i'm also applying to GTown :)
might be too late, but i do see one thing that i would change if i were you.
You should add a wrapping sentence at the end to sum up why this whole experience was significant to you. this sentence if you choose to add it will tie everything back to the prompt and make it much easier for the reader to find the significance the activity had on you--I, for one, had trouble finding it when i skimmed through it very quickly.
Remember this essay is about you not about the water project.
the essay for the most part is very good, but it seems that by the last para you lost focus. instead of getting back to the topic--the significance the activity had on you--the focus remained on the water project and its significance.
Make this one change and your essay will be perfect!
Good luck to you!! i'm also applying to GTown :)
