Posts by Ninjarebelxxx

Ninjarebelxxx

Dec 13, 2011

Undergraduate / 'sustainability and educating the next generation' - NYU supplement [3]

Cool! I'm also applying for NYU :) You have a well written and convincing essay. Keep up the good work!

Somethings that you might want to fix are:
- next generation to be green leaders . to become green leaders would sound much nicer.
- You might want to write teen out. So instead of saying teen, write teenager.
- make use of its influence.. Makes
- conducts environmental assessment and propose green plan to improve its footprint.. change to assessments, proposes, plans
- This sentence sounds a bit awkward. The Green Grants program provides students who have the same goal as me with the best opportunities. . Instead, you could probably say something along the lines of The Green Grants program provides students with the best opportunities who also share the same goals as me...

-NYU is one step ahead of other schoolschools
- pionnerpioneer's

Ninjarebelxxx

Dec 12, 2011

Undergraduate / (Martial Arts) Common Application: extracurricular activities [3]

Thanks for the feedback jfrancishutch! This was a draft that I wrote up really quickly. I am not very good at expressing myself. I wondering if it would be okay to take a different approach to answering the prompt. My friend suggested that I should not use my UC #2 approach but instead rewrite a new one instead. Is it okay to approach this prompt in a "story" kind of way or is it better to just get straight to the point?

Ninjarebelxxx

Dec 12, 2011

Undergraduate / (Martial Arts) Common Application: extracurricular activities [3]

Hi, I was wondering if you guys could give me some feedback on my short response to this prompt:
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

I have been practicing Wushu for the about seven years. Wushu has helped me relief stress, overcome my fear of stage fright, and build my confidence. Wushu enabled me to confront my fears of stage fright because I was often invited to perform in shows and festivals around the Bay Area. Having performed in various shows and festivals, I gained the confidence of speaking in front of my peers. Talking in front in front of my peers was not something that intimidated me anymore. During times of stress, I was able to use chi to help calm my body and relieve stress. Chi is a type of energy that involves slow breathing along with different movements that allows the body to relax. Wushu helped me open up and express myself in a way that I was not able to at school. Through my passion of Wushu, I created a website to share my passion with others hoping to enlighten others about this amazing sport at youtheca.com/activity/wushu.