prospopt2012
Dec 25, 2011
Undergraduate / "Why Columbia?" "Zombie Apocalypse" - Columbia University Supplement [4]
Thanks! :) I'll make sure to make those changes.
Thanks! :) I'll make sure to make those changes.
prospopt2012
Dec 24, 2011
Undergraduate / "Why Columbia?" "Zombie Apocalypse" - Columbia University Supplement [4]
Hey guys! I'd appreciate any suggestions for this essay! :)
Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why. (1500 characters)
The first time I visited New York City, it was barren; it was nothing I had imagined. Few people were "out-and-about" in the streets and NYC's famed yellow cabs were nowhere to be found. Street parking was readily available. No, it was not a zombie apocalypse. Rather, it was early Easter morning and most of the city's residents were either at Mass or staking out seats for the Easter parade. Thus, although location may not be my primary motivation for attending Columbia, it would be an outright lie if I told you that location is not one of the things I find appealing about the university. Coupled with Columbia's renowned Core curriculum, the opportunities presented by the city itself are immense. Nowhere else in the world are aspiring business professionals like me presented with the opportunity to study at a world-class university within a ten mile radius of the New York Stock Exchange and the headquarters for City Group Inc., JP Morgan Chase, Time Warner Entertainment Co., and dozens of other Fortune 500 companies. Nowhere else can I find the opportunity to have both a broad education and specialize my study in a field I am passionate about. Nowhere else can I achieve these things but at Columbia.
Hey guys! I'd appreciate any suggestions for this essay! :)
Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why. (1500 characters)
The first time I visited New York City, it was barren; it was nothing I had imagined. Few people were "out-and-about" in the streets and NYC's famed yellow cabs were nowhere to be found. Street parking was readily available. No, it was not a zombie apocalypse. Rather, it was early Easter morning and most of the city's residents were either at Mass or staking out seats for the Easter parade. Thus, although location may not be my primary motivation for attending Columbia, it would be an outright lie if I told you that location is not one of the things I find appealing about the university. Coupled with Columbia's renowned Core curriculum, the opportunities presented by the city itself are immense. Nowhere else in the world are aspiring business professionals like me presented with the opportunity to study at a world-class university within a ten mile radius of the New York Stock Exchange and the headquarters for City Group Inc., JP Morgan Chase, Time Warner Entertainment Co., and dozens of other Fortune 500 companies. Nowhere else can I find the opportunity to have both a broad education and specialize my study in a field I am passionate about. Nowhere else can I achieve these things but at Columbia.
prospopt2012
Dec 18, 2011
Undergraduate / 'The Nerds' - USC Engineering Supplement [5]
AWESOME ANSWER! A few suggestions though:
Calculus, electricity, DNA: initially controversialandbut gradually revolutionary, yet each was discovered by a nerd who fit none of the modern *it's a bit confusing... are you saying here that modern stereotypes suggest, as you explain later, "less social ostracism and more academic enthusiasm" or vice-versa?* stereotypes.
Though previouslyconnotingassociated with social ineptitude, I believe that "nerdiness" isshould be considered desirable, suggesting less social ostracism and more academic enthusiasm. For where would the world be if we weren't proud to be nerds?
I would certainly appreciate if you would look over/offer your criticisms for my Univ. of Rochester short answers:
AWESOME ANSWER! A few suggestions though:
Calculus, electricity, DNA: initially controversial
Though previously
I would certainly appreciate if you would look over/offer your criticisms for my Univ. of Rochester short answers:
prospopt2012
Dec 17, 2011
Undergraduate / "Oregonians" + "Practicality" - University of Rochester Supplements [2]
Hello! This is my first time using this site, so I'd really appreciate all of the help I can get!
Each of the following topics recommend that I answer the prompt in about 125 words, with a 1000 character limit.
1. Why Rochester? - Rochester students live on campus together but commit to self-direction and self-determination through our curriculum. Independent, confident thinkers who ''play well with others'' thrive here. Show us how this uncommon intersection of traits describes you, and tell us why you would excel at Rochester.
I knew that we Oregon-folk call ourselves "Oregonians," but I learned that people from Florida call themselves "Floridians", and that more specifically, people from Nashville had no idea what to call themselves. Learning that Georgians call "garbage" what Californians call "trash", I shared that Oregonians divide waste by "compost", "recycling", and "trash".
These were the kinds of topics my group of competitive, business-savvy "frenemies" attending a workshop at the National Leadership Conference this last summer discussed in lieu of creating a team name. So epic was our conversation that when the instructor called for us to finalize a name, we created an acronym to encompass the quirky, dynamic nature of our group. We were Easily Distracted, Unique, and Awesome. We were Team EDUA.
123 words, 796 characters... It's kind of weird, but what do you think?
2. Meliora: 'Ever better' - The University's motto, Meliora, directs our focus toward continual improvement through research, understanding, and collaborative efforts. Offer an example from your personal experience of an obstacle you faced or a problem you identified. Describe the actions you took and the result.
I have a passion, a compulsive desire to understand. I seek real-world application and yearn for practicality. At times, this fervor has led me to the brink of frustration; in elementary school, it created some of my most absurd notions about mathematics, to the point that I believed it embodied everything evil in the world. I wanted to know math, to apply the formulas and ideas I memorized in class to the "real world" and understand the concepts behind them, but no one could provide a more sufficient answer to my questions than the dreaded phrase: "You'll use it eventually, so don't worry." Even so, I persisted, yearning for the day that someone would be able to answer my questions.
It wasn't until high school that I found teachers willing to discuss the practical applications of mathematics, but slowly, classes like AP Statistics and AP Calculus became the highlight of my day, and concepts like Simpson's paradox became something to ponder rather than scorn. Looking back, I'm thankful that I persevered in search of the Meliora, because in doing so, I found the opportunity to thrive.
186 words, 1106 characters... I would really appreciate some help with shortening it down...
THANK YOU SO MUCH!
Hello! This is my first time using this site, so I'd really appreciate all of the help I can get!
Each of the following topics recommend that I answer the prompt in about 125 words, with a 1000 character limit.
1. Why Rochester? - Rochester students live on campus together but commit to self-direction and self-determination through our curriculum. Independent, confident thinkers who ''play well with others'' thrive here. Show us how this uncommon intersection of traits describes you, and tell us why you would excel at Rochester.
I knew that we Oregon-folk call ourselves "Oregonians," but I learned that people from Florida call themselves "Floridians", and that more specifically, people from Nashville had no idea what to call themselves. Learning that Georgians call "garbage" what Californians call "trash", I shared that Oregonians divide waste by "compost", "recycling", and "trash".
These were the kinds of topics my group of competitive, business-savvy "frenemies" attending a workshop at the National Leadership Conference this last summer discussed in lieu of creating a team name. So epic was our conversation that when the instructor called for us to finalize a name, we created an acronym to encompass the quirky, dynamic nature of our group. We were Easily Distracted, Unique, and Awesome. We were Team EDUA.
123 words, 796 characters... It's kind of weird, but what do you think?
2. Meliora: 'Ever better' - The University's motto, Meliora, directs our focus toward continual improvement through research, understanding, and collaborative efforts. Offer an example from your personal experience of an obstacle you faced or a problem you identified. Describe the actions you took and the result.
I have a passion, a compulsive desire to understand. I seek real-world application and yearn for practicality. At times, this fervor has led me to the brink of frustration; in elementary school, it created some of my most absurd notions about mathematics, to the point that I believed it embodied everything evil in the world. I wanted to know math, to apply the formulas and ideas I memorized in class to the "real world" and understand the concepts behind them, but no one could provide a more sufficient answer to my questions than the dreaded phrase: "You'll use it eventually, so don't worry." Even so, I persisted, yearning for the day that someone would be able to answer my questions.
It wasn't until high school that I found teachers willing to discuss the practical applications of mathematics, but slowly, classes like AP Statistics and AP Calculus became the highlight of my day, and concepts like Simpson's paradox became something to ponder rather than scorn. Looking back, I'm thankful that I persevered in search of the Meliora, because in doing so, I found the opportunity to thrive.
186 words, 1106 characters... I would really appreciate some help with shortening it down...
THANK YOU SO MUCH!
