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Dec 27, 2011
Writing Feedback / 'a guideline should be provided to students' - Cambridge 5 task 2 [2]
Hi there, would you please help me in my essay?
Thank you in advance.
In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
To be away from education for just a limited (ed?) period is becoming a challengeable issue these days. Specially pros and corns of having a gap between high school years and higher education is too disputable subject. In my point of view it is not only a good idea to have a year off before university but also it is strongly valuable and advisable for young people.
To improve students' revenue at university, it is a good idea to have a rest before start this important stage of their life. If this period bounds to just one year (not any more), students can have a year of enjoy, (and?) rest and get pleasure from it. As a result they (will?) would gain sufficient energy to continue their education.
Furthermore some students may prefer to go to work and got (get, obtain?) a better perspective of their future career. According to this pre-experiment they can make more wisely and open-eyed decision for their profession. In this way the rate of regretful of their choice will be decrease.
Nevertheless I believe that a guideline should be provided to students to prepare them how to use this year in a right manner. Since there are always some students who want to scape from school, it would be a vital (?) issue to teach them how to apply (use?) this valuable time.
In conclusion having a year off before starting university degree can have several advantages for students. Specially if a preparation plan teaches them how to profit this time wisely.
Hi there, would you please help me in my essay?
Thank you in advance.
In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
To be away from education for just a limited (ed?) period is becoming a challengeable issue these days. Specially pros and corns of having a gap between high school years and higher education is too disputable subject. In my point of view it is not only a good idea to have a year off before university but also it is strongly valuable and advisable for young people.
To improve students' revenue at university, it is a good idea to have a rest before start this important stage of their life. If this period bounds to just one year (not any more), students can have a year of enjoy, (and?) rest and get pleasure from it. As a result they (will?) would gain sufficient energy to continue their education.
Furthermore some students may prefer to go to work and got (get, obtain?) a better perspective of their future career. According to this pre-experiment they can make more wisely and open-eyed decision for their profession. In this way the rate of regretful of their choice will be decrease.
Nevertheless I believe that a guideline should be provided to students to prepare them how to use this year in a right manner. Since there are always some students who want to scape from school, it would be a vital (?) issue to teach them how to apply (use?) this valuable time.
In conclusion having a year off before starting university degree can have several advantages for students. Specially if a preparation plan teaches them how to profit this time wisely.
