Undergraduate / common app short (keen on becoming a member of the student body) [5]

hi! i don't quite understand what exactly is to be written in the short essay for the common app.. am i supposed to write about what exactly i did, or more about what i learnt? i have currently done two versions, with a slightly different focus though the language is mostly the same..

any comments on the essays would be much appreciated :) thank you!

In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).

Version 1:
Ever since I joined high school, I was extremely keen on becoming a member of the student body. The dedication, the bond, the service - it all fascinated me. But I was afraid, afraid of failure, afraid of failing after shamelessly pasting my face on the walls of the college and blatantly canvassing myself. I tried and to my surprise I succeeded. Through the various events that I was involved in, I have developed my ability to communicate and manage people effectively. While I discovered my strengths in my optimism and enthusiasm, I also recognized my weakness - my inability to delegate work, which I hope to work on in college. My humbling experience in a logistical field has taught me to value personal satisfaction more than public recognition and has instilled in me traits of responsibility, determination and perseverance, defining traits of a good leader.

Version 2:
My much awaited enthusiasm about having successful become a member of the student body, after shamelessly pasting my face on the walls, faltered when I heard the news that I would become a blazer quartermaster, the most undesired job in council. I did not want to sit for hours in a musty room full of sweaty blazers, only to serve peers who left without even a hint of appreciation. But what could I do? I had committed myself to serve the school. I started out unhappy, but committed. Gradually, as the days went by, I experienced a moment of epiphany, a moment that would change my outlook on leadership forever. It then hit me than leadership was not positional, but personal. This humbling experience in a logistical field taught me to value personal satisfaction more than public recognition and instilled in me traits of responsibility, determination and perseverance, defining traits of a good leader.