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Posts by kenben12
Joined: Dec 30, 2011
Last Post: Jan 17, 2012
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kenben12   
Jan 17, 2012
Undergraduate / 'being close to my family' - science personal essay [3]

Science became one of my most predominant interest for a years. After such recognization from past events, my admiration for science magnified.

Thats the best I can do
kenben12   
Jan 17, 2012
Scholarship / Lesson from Nature - scholarship [2]

"Brian said his final goodbye to his mom with infiite amount of tears"

"Humans always want to..."

"Nature existed long arrow of time...

Other than I think your in good shape
kenben12   
Jan 6, 2012
Undergraduate / 'The appealing characteristic is global awareness' - FSU [3]

Florida State University is more than just a world-class academic institution preparing you for a future career. We are a caring community of well-rounded individuals who embrace leadership, learning, service, and global awareness. With this in mind, which of these characteristics appeal most to you and why?

The essay is an important part of your application. It assists the University in learning about you as an individual, independent of your academic grade point average, test scores, and other objective data. Your essay should be no longer than 500 words.

Florida State University is more than just a world-class academic institution preparing you for a future career. We are a caring community of well-rounded individuals who embrace leadership, learning, service, and global awareness. With this in mind, which of these characteristics appeal most to you and why?

The most appealing characteristic is global awareness. Reason being is because many things in our society needs to be changed. As a student, I want to be a civil engineer. The modern world, with its sophisticated technology and innovation, is changing. Civil engineers are imperative to this change; they construct roads, bridges, and other modes of transportation, which is important for fast communication.

With my Career plan, becoming a civil engineer, I hope to captivate and satisfy everyone in my community to a better way of living. My job is to make sure individuals are living in the most easiest and comfortable way. With better roads, bridges and other means of transportaion, it will conduct in a better environment that will change numerous of activities and economic issues. Doing so, will lead to a better growth in our future metropolitan city.

Being able to learn in a environment that will contribute to my global awareness is a characteristic I hope to acquire and stay commited to as I proceed my eduacation and life. My future goal is merely to create a better world for individuals in society. It is as if Im studying to save the world. I will experience new things and use my captured knowledge to flourish a new community.Global awareness is a responsibilty that many people should take into consideration.

Therefore, by studying civil engineering in Florida State University, I can be more aware of the needs of the world and lead the globe into a new world of technology.
kenben12   
Jan 6, 2012
Undergraduate / 'raised in a Christian family' - Pepperdine Prompt [2]

Instead of "I have been raised in a Christian family throughout my life" try I have been raised by a...

I grew older this part of my life began to irritated me

Change "and through this I not only affected myself but hurt my mother as well as my education" and put "and not only have

i been affected by this discontent situatution, but my mother and education were impaired."

Overall I think this is a great essay with nice vivid detailed adjectives to boost your essay into life
kenben12   
Dec 30, 2011
Undergraduate / A Sons Hero, UCF Essay - My family constructed me who I am today [3]

How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?

My family environment has construct me into the I am today. I was raised my a strong and encouraging mother. Throughout my life my mother showed me how to do things the right way. If I show impatient ambition for materialistic things such as cars or sneakers, she tells me to put a hold on my eagerness and continue to follow the traits of a good person and I will fufill my aspiration. Adoring someone like her, gives me a motive in succeeding in life. Every admirable action I do, is because of her provacation which sparks my personality. I believe I carry the characteristic traits of a diligent, amicable, and blithe person.
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