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Posts by dontev22
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dontev22   
Jan 1, 2012
Writing Feedback / Ielts that competitive sports, both team and individual [4]

... no place for competitive sports in schools.ButHowever, it is impossible to argue ...

Firstly, s chool years are very important ...

...and other abilities are cruc ial factors for supporting the opinion ...
For example, during the football or basketball matchesgamesstudents have chances to show themselves who are not ...This is another main reason which gives everybody a lot real stories which need just to remember.

Rewrite the above two sentences.

... might be very helpful in this context.
dontev22   
Dec 31, 2011
Undergraduate / 'the term military brat' - University of South Florida Application [2]

Hey, I was just wondering if someone could revise this short essay I wrote for my application to USF. It was an open topic btw.

To a civilian American, the term military brat can seem like a negative connotation; however, for me the term shows my worldliness and diversity. The lifestyles and cultures associated with being a military brat have most certainly influenced who I am as a person. Growing up as a military brat I have never truly had a place to call "home". It is custom for military brats to move every three to four years. In fact, after living five years in Tampa, Florida I was itching for something new. When I found out I was moving to Germany my sophomore year I was beyond ecstatic. On the other hand, my friends were quite the contrary. I remember one of my friend's, who was apprehensive, stating verbatim, "I don't think I could be a military brat. I have lived in the same town my entire life and I would hate to move."

Moreover, the constant friendship loss associated with being a military brat has forced me to become more amiable and outgoing. The continued presence of an authoritative military figure has molded me into a more respectful and courteous individual. In addition, I have become cunningly adaptable to new environments and have been immersed in many different cultures around the world. I have had the opportunity to attend elementary school in Japan, middle school in the United States, and high school in Germany. I adapt quickly with little to no effort and I am ready for my next "home". Above all, I am dedicated, motivated, and open for a new experience. The characteristics I have acquired in my twelve years of being a military brat have provided me the necessary qualities to excel and become a valuable asset to the USF community.

Thanks, Donte
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