Undergraduate / 'volunteering in the Cardiology Clinic' - COMMON APP SHORT [13]

thank you guys for your feeedback.
i added a sentence to the end but im not sure i feel as if its a bit cheesy!
but here it is : The two summers I spent not only made me more knowledgeable about heart defects/diseases but also made me appreciate my health more than ever.

i will definitely get on helping you guys with your essays.

Undergraduate / 'volunteering in the Cardiology Clinic' - COMMON APP SHORT [13]

HI :)

here goes:
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

My alarm goes off -its 8 AM and I'm rushing to get into the shower.To my mother's amazement I am up early on a bright summer day.It was my first day of volunteering at my local hospital and I was really anxious to see what department I would be placed in. I was placed in the Cardiology Department and was sent to the third floor to begin my day.My first day was uneventful but as weeks went by I got to know everyone better,but I became especially close to my supervisor.She took me under her wings and taught me about heart defects and about devices that are used to monitor the heart.I learned something new everyday as I talked to patients and learned about their unfortunate conditions.Soon I was the first volunteer to show up at the clinic and the last one to leave.The two summers spent at the clinic were each as rewarding as the other.