roz
Jan 1, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Moving away and going to college' - Stanford Roommate Letter [21]
I learned that I'm not the only person in the world that likes volume on even numbers or multiples of five! and I agree, normal is raather boring. [this is to improve your written-out mood ;)]
I haven't exactly figured out what should be said to this prompt but you have successfully conveyed a lot about who you are and I think this is the main point.
Your intro flows nicely in the second draft but doesn't fit very well with the second one. The second sounds slightly more conversational and the second is more ordered. I'd say pick which voice you like better and and either re-write the intro for the third or perfect the second. good luck!
I learned that I'm not the only person in the world that likes volume on even numbers or multiples of five! and I agree, normal is raather boring. [this is to improve your written-out mood ;)]
I haven't exactly figured out what should be said to this prompt but you have successfully conveyed a lot about who you are and I think this is the main point.
Your intro flows nicely in the second draft but doesn't fit very well with the second one. The second sounds slightly more conversational and the second is more ordered. I'd say pick which voice you like better and and either re-write the intro for the third or perfect the second. good luck!