Undergraduate / 'The Game' - JHU essay; Undecided [9]

I like the setting of the essay :) I understand what you're trying to say, but it's possible (just my opinion) that:


, could come off as a bit negative, so maybe you could remove that or tone it down a bit.
Also, when you say


, maybe it would be better to go along the lines of you wanting to explore new things and find out what you really want to do (like you have said in the paragraph after that), becuase this line might also sound a little negative.

Apart from that, its a nice read and it has a good flow and story, and your reasons for going undecided make sense :)

Undergraduate / 'Characteristic Charisma' - Boston University Roommate Supplement [2]

I think you have good content, but the paragraphs are a little abrupt. I'm not sure what format BU wants this answer in, as in, in the format of a conversation, or a normal essay format, but regardless, I think transitions need to be added between paragraphs.

A proper introduction and conclusion is needed to, for there to be a flow, but the points are good :)