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Jan 12, 2012
Undergraduate / "Cheap House Is Not Available" - Apply for University of Texas. [4]
Thankyou so much!
I changed and added something in my essay according to your advice. Now I have another question. Since you mentioned about the "specific subjuct" in the end of my second paragraph, can I add the following words after "which my current school is lacking in this area"?
The Financial Analyst Program McCombs offers is so unique that excites me a lot. I really want to experience as a analyst in my undergraduate period so that my future resume will be much weighted, and I believe the experience will push me to learn something useful in practice, which benefits my future career. In addition, the city Austin attracts me as its steadily prospering. Out of interest, I learnt that Austin is listed among top 5 real estate markets from the Real Estate report from PricewaterhouseCoopers LLP and the Urban Land Institute. Thus, studying the real estate in such an environment can be a good start for my future career.
Also, if I have to delete something, do you think I should delete some quetions I asked in the first paragarph?
Thankyou so much!
I changed and added something in my essay according to your advice. Now I have another question. Since you mentioned about the "specific subjuct" in the end of my second paragraph, can I add the following words after "which my current school is lacking in this area"?
The Financial Analyst Program McCombs offers is so unique that excites me a lot. I really want to experience as a analyst in my undergraduate period so that my future resume will be much weighted, and I believe the experience will push me to learn something useful in practice, which benefits my future career. In addition, the city Austin attracts me as its steadily prospering. Out of interest, I learnt that Austin is listed among top 5 real estate markets from the Real Estate report from PricewaterhouseCoopers LLP and the Urban Land Institute. Thus, studying the real estate in such an environment can be a good start for my future career.
Also, if I have to delete something, do you think I should delete some quetions I asked in the first paragarph?