Undergraduate / 'I release all my stress and unhappiness' - common app short answer [6]

hey guys, this is my short answer, please provide feedback!!

"Hold on." I whispered when I was climbing the mountain near my residential district. Finally, I stepped on the peak. At that moment, I let the breeze dry my sweat and the views of my residential area capture my eyes.

Every weekend, I spend about 2 hours climbing the nearby mountain with my parents. The path is long, about 2 miles; the slope is steep, about 30 degrees. The process is tiring but I can gain a lot. While climbing the mountain, I tell my parents what I have done during the week and they share similar experiences with me, so we can know each other better. With wind blowing, I release all my stress and unhappiness, and get ready for the following week. Besides, I have learned to be perseverant and patient because I figured out that one must expend before getting something, just like before I get to the peak, I have to climb a long way and spend much energy.

The next weekend is coming. The next reunion with the mountain is coming.

Thanks in advance~ Any kind of feedback is welcomed.