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josexirizarryx7

Jan 29, 2012

Essays / Compare/contrast essay about 2 elegy poems - need a strong thesis [3]

I would say that you should compare the poems by their meaning or what they want to transmit. Also you should talk about what you learned from each poem and what does the poet wants to transmit. Adding the poets background and comparing them is also a good idea for a introductory paragraph. Talking about your favorite verses in each poem is also a plus.

Good Luck !

josexirizarryx7

Jan 29, 2012

Undergraduate / (delete "During my years in the *** lab? - how to make it shorter and effective [3]

"I worked in laboratory of Dr. Pinghua Liu at Boston University from junior year. From then, research became part of my daily routine and I enjoyed the process of learning and applying new information, the day to day activities, and group-dynamic." - You should change it into - " I worked in the laboratory....also if you want to reduce it a little bit change the statement day to day activities into daily activities..there are a few other things you could change to make it shorter while still making it effective..other than that I liked it!

josexirizarryx7

Jan 23, 2012

Undergraduate / "My Goal is Success" - Summer Program Essay [NEW]

Essay should be 250 words and it must include : "Please share some of your reasons for wanting to participate in the academic track you have selected as your first choice. In what ways do you feel prepared to contribute to the class and what you hope to gain from your summer experience at Notre Dame? Maximum word limit 250." I'm Puerto Rican, so my english is not the best, as it is my second language. My essay is 321 words and I got no idea on how to reduce it. Please help. Advice on how to improve my essay would greatly be appreciated!

My goal is success, but instead I can change this statement and say "success is my journey not my goal". The journey of success is not easy; it requires a lot of effort and dedication to what I do. Balancing sports, studies, extracurricular activities, and service to the community is clearly not easy, but it is not impossible. Like George Van Valkenburg said: "Accomplishment and success are often the result of commitment and perseverance rather than skill or talent."

I don't have to many reasons, yet these few reasons may lead me to a great program and another big step in my life. First of all, my goal is to be enriched in the area of Law and attending to Notre Dame's Summer Scholars Program will surely fulfill this desire. Second, I would love to be in Notre Dame's campus for two weeks to have a good taste on what really college life consists of. Third, I would love to participate in activities that are fun, yet educative. Fourth, I know Notre Dame is very religious and I'm sure that if I attend to Notre Dame, a little of that spirituality will help me grow as a person. Last but not least, it is my dream to get accepted to this program and if I do manage to get accepted and have the opportunity to go, not only would my dream be fulfilled, but I'm sure those two weeks will be one of the best two weeks of my life.

I feel determined and prepared to contribute to the class in everyway possible. I'm ready to participate and be active in class discussions, helping out those who need help, and above all to be serious and not fool around during class. I'm sure that if go to Notre Dame this summer I will gain skills, experience, memories, new friendships, and above all knowledge, we must remember and note, "Knowledge is power".