Writing Feedback / toefl: overemphasizing on personal lives of famous people by media [6]

I agree and disagree. I agree that the stories are not only unsavory, but a bad influence on younger viewers. However, I feel that the media should promote the famous people that actually try to do good. Some instead of showing paris hilton, they should show angelina jolie (or others that are like princess di or mother theresa, may they rest in peace).

Essays / I need help writing my admission essay, how to start it? Rutgers University [10]

When I wrote my college essay I wrote about all the traveling I have done, how I moved around often when I was growing up and was able to benefit from seeing how people act in different parts of the country.

For my second I described my goals and what I was wanting to do with my life. I also wrote about what I was going to get from going to that university and what I could give back.

Good luck you'll do great.