arthas13
Dec 3, 2008
Writing Feedback / Have there been any bumps in the road in your life. [4]
I agree with hasnaahmed.Maybe try and inverse your story,start from the end.If you wanted this esay to be semi-formal you succeded but if you want it to be informal and f you want to get your readers to really feel your pain I'd suggest:using more adjectives,use metaphores and such.
I agree with hasnaahmed.Maybe try and inverse your story,start from the end.If you wanted this esay to be semi-formal you succeded but if you want it to be informal and f you want to get your readers to really feel your pain I'd suggest:using more adjectives,use metaphores and such.