Writing Feedback / The teaching approach: 'I recommend the teachers to be friendly' [NEW]

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Topic: Some people believe that students work better if the teacher is strict; others think it is better for students, if the teacher has a friendly approach. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

The teaching approach is a vital factor in imparting lessons to the students. Some people argue for strict approach of teaching while some other for friendly approach. In my opinion, the friendly approach is more efficient than the strict one but it is necessary to be strict in certain cases if required.

First let's consider the strict approach of teaching. If the teacher becomes strict during teaching the students are always afraid of their faults. As a result, they do not dare to ask questions even if they do not understand any topic. This may distract the students from learning.The strict approach of teaching gives rise to frustration and in some cases unexpected incidents. Now I am sharing such an incident, I knew a boy who was a medical student. During first year of study he was doing bad in the tutorials because he could not understand the topics. He was frustrated at his performance. His teacher was very strict and rebuked him harshly. At this he frustrated so much that he committed suicide.

On the other hand, if teachers follow the friendly approach of teaching it is found that students become more attentive to their study.The friendly teachers are always able to motivate and convince their students. If he teachers are friendly no fear works on the students and they do not hesitate to ask any questions which make the classes interactive and enjoyable. Children are fond of imitating others and friendly behavior of the teachers helps them to mould their character which makes them friendly in their next life. When I was college student, I was weak in mathematics and I was afraid of it. But my teacher was very friendly; he always inspired me to work hard and solved my problems in a friendly manner. As a result I improved gradually and did well in the final exam.

However, there may have students who do not obey the rules and instructions of the teachers. In this circumstance, the teachers should try to convince them in a friendly approach but if it fails then they should be strict.

To recapitulate, I recommend the teachers to be friendly during teaching as it is proved to be more efficient than being strict.

Writing Feedback / Essay regarding the influence of technology on the way people react to each other [4]

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

As we are social being, we are to interact with other people for our own sake. The development of technology has greatly changed the way we interact with other people. This influence of technology on the relationship people make has both positive and negative aspects.

The advancement of mobile communication technology has revolutionized the way of interaction. Now people can communicate with any person within a moment, they are no longer dependent upon the mailing system via post office. It does not matter whether the desired person is adjacent to or far away from us, it is possible to establish a relationship with him/her within a short possible time. The people of all walks of lives are benefited with this technology. People can deal with their concerned parties via mobile without meeting which saves their time and effort.

Access to the internet is another blessing of technological advancement. Now we can know about any culture, any language, any nation via internet sitting at our home. This helps a lot in establishing a relationship with other people all over the world. Internet has made the people closer to each other. Even we can take university degree and make friends sitting at home because of internet. People now use social networking sites such as facebook, twitter to chat with friends all over the world which was unimaginable without internet. We can send mail to our desired one within a second. If one wants to find out his/her life partner he/she can take the help of internet since there are many wedding sites providing information about bride and bridegroom.

The positive aspect of technology is that it has made our interaction faster, less expensive and easier. Now we can establish a relationship in a short period of time with others. As stated earlier, technology has also some negative sides on public relationship. This happens due to some dishonest and fraud people. These people first try to impress the other people with whom they make fake friendship, then take money by blackmailing them. These fake relationship break eventually causing damage to their lives and money.

In conclusion, despite of some negative aspects, the contribution of technology to the establishment of public relationship is great. Being aware of the fraud people and making justification during establishment of a relation it is possible to proper use of technology.