Undergraduate / 'major in Communications with the hopes' - Transfer Essay for Texas A&M [2]

i would at least add a second closing paragraph. Focus on structure. Follow a logical pattern.

Graduate / Master in IS Management and programming - personal statement [3]

I'd suggest dropping the word, "Keen".There are words with a better sound to them that you can use. It is a very strong word. That K sound is dissonant.

Scholarship / Susan buffet scholarship essay on why you want to go to college [2]

sounds great. The story is solid.