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mikcuff876

Mar 5, 2012

Undergraduate / entrance essay to F I T ..Why would it be to your advantage to participate in the Pro [2]

I would like to know if i am on the right track and what else to add to make it a strong essay...ps the last paragraph is just thoughts

Why would it be to your advantage to participate in the ProTrack Engineering Co-op program option or a hands-on internship through Florida Tech?

I am a practical learner. This was confirmed by a professional evaluation done before entering high school. It was also discovered that I suffer from dyslexia. In 1968, the World Federation of Neurologists defined dyslexia as "a disorder in children who, despite conventional classroom experience, fail to attain the language skills of reading, writing, and spelling commensurate with their intellectual abilities". During high school despite attending classes and understanding I was challenged by the examinations which were mostly required written essay responses and minimal practical response. This is the reason for applying to Florida tech. I know it would be to my advantage to participate in hands- on internship program through Florida. It is easier for me to comprehend something if I have first-hand experience with it also it provides the opportunity to apply knowledge from ones classes to actual real life problems in the field.

This opportunity not only provides work experience which is needed in the world today to get a job but also experience with equipment , which makes me more marketable in the hunt for a job after. This internship program also gives me the chance to explore different areas related to my field of interest. This program will also allow an international student lik me the ability gain some financial support while there.

mikcuff876

Mar 5, 2012

Writing Feedback / The Solar System - "system of the Sun" [3]

Solar System means "system of the Sun". There are 9 planets in our solar system(inclusive of Pluto).These 9 planets are Mercury, Venus, Earth, Mars, Jupiter, Saturn, Uranus, Neptune and Pluto. These 9 planets orbit the sun, meaning they take a specific amount of time to travel around the Sun once. Mercury is the first planet from the Sun. It has a diameter of 3,029 miles(4,878 kilometres). Venus is the second planet from the Sun and has a diameter of 7,515 miles(12,102 kilometres). One day on Venus lasts 243 Earth days. Earth is the third planet from the Sun. It has a diameter of 7,921 miles(12,756 kilometres) and has 1 moon orbiting around it. Mars is the fourth planet form the Sun. It has a diameter of 4,218 miles(6,792 kilometres) and has 2 moons orbiting around it. Jupiter is the fifth planet from the Sun and has a diameter of 88,793 miles(142,984 kilometres) and has at least 16 moons orbiting around it.Jupiter is known as a gas giant. Saturn is the sixth planet from the Sun and has a diameter of 74,853 miles(120,536 kilometres) and has at least 18 moons orbiting around it. Saturn is also a gas giant and has rings of dust, gas and ice encircling it. Uranus is the seventh planet from the Sun and has a diameter of 31,744 miles(51,118 kilometres) and has 17 moons orbiting around it. Neptune is the eighth planet from the Sun and has a diameter of 30,757 miles(49,528 kilometres) and has 8 moons orbiting around it. Pluto is the last planet from the Sun and has a diameter of 1, 430 miles( 2,300 kilometres) and has 1 moon orbiting it. Scientists and other people argue that Pluto is not a planet because it is too far away from the Sun and orbits the Sun in the opposite direction than how other planets orbit the Sun. The Sun is a big star that is really hot. The Scientist Galileo looked at the Sun for too long through a telescope and became blind. The Sun is so hot that if you come closer to it, you will disintegrate in fractions of a second. There are other stars in the Universe that are ten times bigger than our Sun.

did some corrections read it over