Undergraduate / Australia Bound- Study Abroad Essay [4]

Study Abroad to Australia

Since a child, traveling has been a big dream of mine. Growing up as the youngest child, I saw my sister travel to Italy multiple times for study abroad and come back a different person in some aspects. As a sophomore in high school I traveled to Australia on a 3 week long basketball tour. When there we played 6 games in Adelaide, and 2 in Melbourne, while staying with host families and going to high schools, or colleges, throughout the day. We had very little time to ourselves, and although it was an experience we were unable to explore real Australian culture. Since then I have wanted to return, but unable to due to some financial reasons, and wanting to finish my Business Administration degree. Just this semester did it click that I could have the opportunity to continue my studies while traveling.

Not only is traveling back to Australia a dream for my, but will give me another perspective in the business world. I feel that participating in programs outside your school/state/country will allow a person to gain understanding of different concepts within any degree of study. The world of business is changing constantly and even more so around the world. I would also be interested in the internship part of this program, which would gain me an advantage in the business world in the United States, and add to my resume.

Currently, I reside with my parents in Fredonia, NY attending SUNY Fredonia. It is my home town, and has been for the 19+ years of my life. This transition from United States to Australia will allow me to gain independence, and really experience living on my own. While abroad, I hope to gain relationships personally, and professionally. I personally believe that going abroad will also help me to continue with higher education with ease. The same thing every semester becomes tiresome; being able to break my routine and go abroad to Australia will keep me, and anyone for that matter, interested in the academic programs offered.

I firmly believe that participating in a study abroad program is an experience and risk worth taking. The opportunities, relationships, and independence gained can change a person's perspective on the world around us, and the world we live in. Nothing lets us appreciate what we have or don't have more than emerging yourself into another culture.

Writing Feedback / Many animals and plants are dying out today. What are the causes and solutions [2]

Many animals and plants are dying out today. What are the causes and what are your solutions

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Statistics show thatmultiple species(identify) of plants and animals are decreasing gradually.
Unveiling this report has aroused public concerns and has sparked a heated debate aboutdiscussing the causes and solutions (of what?). There are lots of reasons andmany ways to solve this problem , I put my ideals as follows:

First, let us talk about deforestation and the discharge of carbon dioxide, some businessmen use the wood for throw-away chopsticks and tissues; this is a huge waste of natural resources. Also, with the development of the technology, the combustion of the minerals, petroleum, natural gas and coal were increasing which wreak the natural resource and cause the dying of the plants.

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The law enforcement department should elevate the public awareness of the preserving of the environment. and make some harsh steps to punish people who disobey the rules.

Also people use the animals for animal experiment and medical research. What is more, some people poach to eat the meat of the animal or to sell it to the restaurant, these actions are cruel and inhumane, we have to make harsh measures to forbid these activities, such as go to jail and pay a fine. Animals are companions of the human, and we should preserve animals instead of killing them.

Last but not least, the greenhouse effect breaks the balance of the ecosystem, and the animals and plants can not live in the unstable environment .So we should decrease the pollution of the air and protect the ecological equilibrium.

In conclusion, the best way to protect the animals and plants is to decrease the deforestation and the pollution.

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