Undergraduate / 'Golfing activity' - common app short answer [9]

Need help ASAP, my deadline is quickly approaching and this is the last part of my application.

Directions: In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).

I first started golfing around age six. My grandfather would take me to the local practice range when he would visit. He would bring a set of his old clubs that were cut down to fit me. I began golfing only during my grandfathers visits, mainly at the practice range. Eventually, he eased me on to actual courses. During my freshman year I made the high school team. Golf has been a very positive activity in my life because I have been able to see my practice pay off by gradually moving up in the rankings. During my freshman year, I was in the middle of the JV lineup, and, during my junior year I was invited to the varsity team to fill the number three spot. I was offered my varsity spot during my senior year as well, but due to a knee injury, I was unable to compete.

My activity is Golf. I'm not sure if the first 5 statements are really necessary/relevant to the rest of my answer or not. Also I feel like I should explain the reason why golf ended for me after my junior year because of an injury and not that I simply stopped playing but don't have the room. It is 150 words exactly.

Undergraduate / Admission Essay about tearing my ACL [5]

This is my essay for the common app. Would like some review on it please. I also have my elaboration on an activity from the common app, it is after the essay would like some review on that too, it says a max of 150 words, i feel like i should add on but dont know what to add. thanks

One of the most frightening and painful times in my life also provided me with valuable lessons I will use the rest of my life.

Last spring, I suffered tears to my ACL and meniscus, tendons in the knee, while skiing. When I tore these tendons, it was one of the most stressful times of my life. Everyday I would be waiting to hear from a different doctor, only to find out something else wrong with my knee. Eventually I had surgery performed on my knee, however I am still paying the price today.

This experience has taught me a lot. First, it has taught me to weigh out the consequences whenever I am in a situation involving risk. Often, I have found that the reward is not worth the risk. I chose to take a risk and go off of a jump on my skis, this decision has changed my life forever. It cost me 3 months without any use of my leg, as well as a lifetime of worrying about my knee. No matter what, I will never be able to use my knee in a carefree way. The injury will always be in the back of my mind. This does not even include the financial impact it has had.

Another lesson I learned from this is to be patient, much of which also involves debating the consequences. After my surgery, I had to do a lot of waiting. There were a lot of things that only time would heal. I am normally a fairly active person, so waiting around for my knee to heal was tough. Along with being patient, I had to debate on numerous accounts whether it was worth taking the risk and doing something and possibly prolonging my recovery, or waiting until I was positive that I was ready.

In closing, I learned a lot from what was a really frightening and stressful time. Including weighing out risk versus reward, and patience.

Golf has been part of my life for a long time. I first started golfing around 5 years old. My grandfather would take me out when he visited because my dad doesn't golf. It has brought me very close to him.