Writing Feedback / "Many people visit museums when they travel to new places"; HISTORY [5]

They arranged all the model of motor cycles since the first time it is invented to the current 21st century.

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Writing Feedback / Playing Outdoor Sports - Essay - Help [3]

In this new millennium era, outdoor sports are said to be fun, enjoyable and could help in maintaning a good health. As to support my statement, I do involve myself in outdoor sports even though I had to concentrate on my studies. Soccer is a sport which I played often during the weekends because coincidentally, there is a soccer field near my neighbourhood. My interest in soccer began to build up back when I was a little boy and I love playing it till now. What I've learnt from my experiences are the importance of bonding relationships between friends, co-workers or relatives and the benefit of sports in keeping our body at optimum health level Also, playing sports such as soccer is a great way to release tensions and angers. Besides that, I participated in inter-school soccer competition and soccer competition for Police Youth Programme. By participating in competitions and having the opportunity to play together with my team created a sense of belonging within me because I knew my team always has my back. I had widen my circle of friends, met my old classmates and distant friends and had new friendships with my enemies. I had an enemy in the past but after we were partnered together by our captain, we had build a new friendship and who could have know, we are best buddy now.