Writing Feedback / IELTS 2-- old buildings should be knocked down? [6]

"however, this kind of buildings no cover in the essay." did not make sense

also try not to use "in this essay"

"We set up a building which plan to use 20 years" who's "we" me, you or anyone. You could say the Government or Investors.

Also "We set up a building which plan to use 20 years" missing something yes! "We set up a building which is planedtoforuseusage of 20 years"

Overall Good points and very nice essay.

Danny Hou

Student

Red = get rid of it
bold= replace or add