Undergraduate / EMORY why essay, thanks a lot for your comments! [6]

(does it clear and do i need to rewrite the conclusion?)

Many students decide to apply to Emory University based on our size, location, reputation, and yes, the weather. Besides these valid reasons as a possible college choice, why is Emory University a particularly good match for you?

When I was researching masses of information about many other schools but nothing had created as strong an image as the Emory's core institutional values of community involvement, strong liberal arts education with ample resource in university and diversify culture.

Like the two founders of "Volunteer Emory", I have explored my potential abilities to be a good leader by establishing and running two big volunteer organizations. Through these organizations, I have influenced the several hundred members of my organizations, passing on my passion for volunteering to others, to foster our community sense. Since I have held some eco-friendly volunteer activities, I realized that our action really can help others better understand how their daily actions affect their immediate environment. Therefore, I want to involve in Sustainable Partnerships for Atlanta Neighborhoods project (SPAN) to spread my volunteer passion.

A strong liberal arts education with rich resource in university will provide the best possible learning environment for me. Emory has incredible student to faculty ratio of a mere 7:1 and personal contact with the world-class, diverse faculty. I also look forward to insightful class discussions with amazing classmates with whom I want to build lifelong friendships. Strong academics class with excellent support systems will empower me. Therefore, Emory is my best choice because of its liberal arts strength!

Emory University is eye-opening in many different ways, not only to racial and religious diversity, it's also geographic and demographic diversity. In addition to the international study programs that span the globe in Emory , more than 220 groups and extracurricular activities present will shape me with multiplex culture aware.

I am sure that Emory will certainly provide me with the top quality undergraduate education that I need to empower me to transform my world!

Undergraduate / 'I am an independent girl' - Rice why essay & why social science school [4]

I am not a native English, and the dealine is impending, i really need your help!!!

What motivated you to apply to Rice University? Please be specific and limit your response to 200 words/2000 characters

I am an independent girl with the pursuit of education of liberal arts and opportunities of exploring leadership. When my teacher mentioned her experience of studying in Rice, I realized that Rice can provide me with opportunities to explore my academic and leadership abilities.

Since I have experienced small class setting in Harvard Summit for Young Leaders in China , I strongly desire to pursue similar liberal art education with ample rescourse in university. Rice has incredible student to faculty ratio of a mere 5:1, lots of personal contact with professors, insightful class discussions with amazing classmates who I want to build lifelong friendship, strong academics class with excellent support system where I would be known by a name and not a number and unique residential college experience. Therefore, Rice is my best choice because of its liberal arts programs!

Harvard Business Review that said: "The journey to authentic leaderships begins with understanding the story of your life."I have explored my potential abilities to be this kind of leader by establishing and running these two volunteer organizations. However, the life in Rice can provide me with the great opportunity to develop my further leader skills, such as the Summer Mentorship Experience(SME).From SME, I will deepen my recognition of leadership because of specific courses and interact with recognized leaders.

My persistence and diligence have help me overcome many difficulties in my life. I am fighting for my future, for my life! When I hear that" Fight for Rice, Rice fight on, loyal sons arise...Fight, fight, fight!", I am sure that Rice's spirit will encourage me to fight on.

With the understanding that the choice of academic school you indicated is not binding, explain why you are applying to that particular school of study.

I am the applicant who has the genuine interest in the fundamental social sciences: Policy Studies and Economics. Therefor the Social Science School of Rice University fits my study goal perfectly.

From my experience of the Hukou system( the China's household registration system divides the population into two groups, City-Hukou and Country-Hukou. Only students with City-Hukou can attend the best public schools in a city. Students with Country-Hukou must attend substandard private schools.), I realized that whether one can get an education in China depends on a "birth lottery". Since education promotes social mobility, the Hukou system cause a wider gap between the rich and poor. Consequently, I have pondered whether the Hukou system of providing education could be better understood by studying Policy Studies and Economics, since they provide frameworks for analyzing how society distributes its scarce resources.

I took GCE A-Level Economics in high school because I wanted to better understand how to design and improve state policies that would give the poor more access to scarce resources. Also, I wanted to better understand the reasons for the great inequalities I see in China despite our rapid economic growth, and why in general some countries are so rich and others so poor.

Both inside and outside of the Economics class, I learnd that there are multiple causes of underdevelopment in addition to education inadequacies. From Jeffrey Sachs' "The End of Poverty" to Paul Collier's book "The Bottom Billion", I realized that there are multiple causes of underdevelopment in addition to education inadequacies, such as bad transportation infrastructure and corrupt governance. I now realize that an education program like STUDY-BUSH helps address only one of the root causes of poverty.

I am sure that my study of Economics and Policy Studies will provide me a broader stage to make my dream come true, the dream of cooperating with others to help the poor by making the market economy policies more practical for them. Your Social Science School will certainly provide me with the top quality undergraduate education that I need to achieve my study goals and realize my life's dream!

Thank you so much!!!!