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Sep 5, 2013
Writing Feedback / My Holiday (quick weekend) essay [6]
("restaurant" is not definite so you must use "a")
("worry about" doesn't make much sense in this sentence)
--> "kind of" is spoken language so I don't think you should use it in a piece of writing.
--> again, "got" is quite colloquial, so you should use "bought" instead.
It'sIt was even harder to find
--> you are writing about something in the past, so use past tense in all your sentences.
You should really work on your grammar if you want to improve your writing.
Best
I spent most of the time to working at thea restaurant
("restaurant" is not definite so you must use "a")
There waswere a few things to worry abouttake care of
("worry about" doesn't make much sense in this sentence)
I was kind of worried
--> "kind of" is spoken language so I don't think you should use it in a piece of writing.
I gotbought two jeans and three t-shirts .
--> again, "got" is quite colloquial, so you should use "bought" instead.
--> you are writing about something in the past, so use past tense in all your sentences.
You should really work on your grammar if you want to improve your writing.
Best
