Writing Feedback / 'The goal isn't to live forever' - Toefl Essay [4]

Hi,
I need someone to check & correct my toefl essay, please.
It's about a recent news story that had effected me in some way.

Saturday, 16 June was the death of the second crown heir Prince Nayef Bin Abdul Aziz Al Saud. His death
has affected the people as much as its impact in the kingdom.
Prince Nayef Bin Abdul Aziz Al Saud was one of the greatest men that The Kingdom of Saudi Arabia has ever had.
He loved the people and cared about them a lot. He was strict, but kind at the same time. He had a great power and God

knows he never used it unfairly. Shortly he ruled the kingdom by the laws of God, and losing a man with such a high morals

was certainly a tragedy to me and to the people, but also an incentive to continue on the path of his majesty.
Chuck Palahniuk once said " We all die. The goal isn't to live forever, but to create something that will".
Prince Nayef Bin Abdul Aziz Al Saud did.