Writing Feedback / IELTS - REWRITE - Public libraries should not provide books only [4]

Topic:The main purpose of public libraries should be to provide books. Public libraries should not spend their limited resources on computer software, videos or DVDs. To what extent do you agree or d

Today, Public libraries have been able to provide a wide range of modern resources such as computer software, videos or DVDs. Some people think that the traditional function that libraries used to have has been greatly neglected because of this and the main purpose of a library should still be providing books. From my perspective, I do not agree their views.

Firstly, I would like to point out that, the function of a library should not be restricted to providing books only, but to providing all kinds of learning materials. A good library is somewhere people can acquire advanced knowledge effectively, regardless whether they are reading a book, or they are watching a video. Therefore, it is essential that a library can provide advanced and convenient resources to public, which helps individuals to acquire different knowledge quicker and easier. Meanwhile, from a library's perspective, the maintenance of modern materials such as online books or software is much simpler than that of a numerous books. A library can also save more space of bookshelves for the public to use.

Nevertheless, some people believe that this trend is making a library a totally different place. Individuals are no longer reading books and sitting before the table quietly. Instead, they are watching videos on Youtube, chatting online or even playing games. It is a fact that these amusements may attract people's attention. However, I believe that nowadays many libraries have already made proper rules and regulations to reduce such actions. For Instance, quiet areas have been made available in many libraries while people can also get relaxed and use the Internet freely in a computer lab.

Overall, I do not think libraries should be restricted by providing books only. There is no doubt that traditional books are crucial in one's life, but this does not mean that books are the only resource that people can find in a library.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS - REWRITE - children development and modern games [4]

Some people believe that modern children's games negatively affect the development of their skills compared to traditional games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, there has been a significant change in the way that children play games. This is driven by the improvement of computer science, which allows young kids to have fun with their peers before a computer screen playing various kinds of modern games, instead of playing traditional outdoor games. Some people think this trend would have an adverse effect to the development of a young person. Personally, I agree with their views.

Firstly, a child's physical posture can be damaged by sitting in front of a computer all day and their eyes can be negatively affected by starring at the screen for a long time. Modern games also make young people addicted, which is very common in this day and age, that children no longer want to do outdoor activities or even stand up and walk for a while when they are playing. Therefore, the physical development of a young kid is threatened, when modern games make them a lack of physical exercise as a whole. Secondly, these youngsters addicted in modern games are restricted to social skills. They might be able to communicate well via the Internet. However, when it comes to a face-to-face communication, many young people have shown a lack of social experience, which is essential for their future working lives.

Nevertheless, some people believe that playing modern games helps young kids to learn how to use computer more efficiently, which is a very important skill in the new century. It is true that computers are crucial in one's life in the contemporary world. However, this should not be the reason for youngsters playing too much computer games. Rather than preparing with the knowledge of using a computer, young kids should first learn to communicate and cooperate with each other, and to take responsibility to their own physical conditions (such as having a favorite sport and doing it regularly). Therefore, traditional games are preferable for people at a young age to help them acquire the essential knowledge.

Overall, I think it is not a good idea to allow young kids spend too much time on modern games. They can develop their computer skills later in their life, when they are old enough and managed to have a good self-control ability.

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