sherry_6711
Jul 9, 2012
Writing Feedback / "my aunt's weeding" - recent news story affected you the most? [14]
Thanks for all of you to support me here.
Regards
Shirin
Thanks for all of you to support me here.
Regards
Shirin
sherry_6711
Jul 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / "my aunt's weeding" - recent news story affected you the most? [14]
Dear Mr Zafari,
Thank you for your revising my grammar and wordings and thank you once again for picking up my mistakes.
Regards
Shirin
Dear Mr Zafari,
Thank you for your revising my grammar and wordings and thank you once again for picking up my mistakes.
Regards
Shirin
sherry_6711
Jul 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / "my aunt's weeding" - recent news story affected you the most? [14]
Dear Mr Zafari,
Thank you once again.Yes,I am Iranian.
Regards
Shirin
In our life, there are many events or new stories that happen each hour. But only what affect us the most, is important. Recently, the one that has affected me the most is about a woman fighting lung cancer. This story teaches me efficiently how life is valuable and left a great influence on me.
To begin with, this story is about a woman who is diagnosed with lung cancer. She encourages herself and her family to be optimistic and declined that her diseases could not be treated. She tries to spend most of her time with her family and enjoys her life.
Moreover, she does much charitable works to other people. Despite of her pain she is so lively and believes that life is too short and human life is valuable because each single person is not replaceable.
All in all, I greatly appreciate this woman. Indirectly, she taught me a valuable lesson: there are situations in life that are hard to undergo, but nothing is impossible as long as we try to.
Dear Mr Zafari,
Thank you once again.Yes,I am Iranian.
Regards
Shirin
In our life, there are many events or new stories that happen each hour. But only what affect us the most, is important. Recently, the one that has affected me the most is about a woman fighting lung cancer. This story teaches me efficiently how life is valuable and left a great influence on me.
To begin with, this story is about a woman who is diagnosed with lung cancer. She encourages herself and her family to be optimistic and declined that her diseases could not be treated. She tries to spend most of her time with her family and enjoys her life.
Moreover, she does much charitable works to other people. Despite of her pain she is so lively and believes that life is too short and human life is valuable because each single person is not replaceable.
All in all, I greatly appreciate this woman. Indirectly, she taught me a valuable lesson: there are situations in life that are hard to undergo, but nothing is impossible as long as we try to.
sherry_6711
Jul 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / "my aunt's weeding" - recent news story affected you the most? [14]
Dear Mr Zafari,
Thank you for your advice.
Can i rewrite this essay with the same topic?
Regards
Shirin
Dear Mr Zafari,
Thank you for your advice.
Can i rewrite this essay with the same topic?
Regards
Shirin
sherry_6711
Jul 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / "my aunt's weeding" - recent news story affected you the most? [14]
Dear Mr Zafari,
I try to improve my writing and I know that is not good enough for TOEFL test. I am thankful for your attention to my writing.
Regards
Shirin
Dear Mr Zafari,
I try to improve my writing and I know that is not good enough for TOEFL test. I am thankful for your attention to my writing.
Regards
Shirin
sherry_6711
Jul 7, 2012
Writing Feedback / "my aunt's weeding" - recent news story affected you the most? [14]
News and stories depend on their nature which is good or bad, can have an effect on our life.One of the new stories which has affected my life was my aunt's weeding.She finally got married at the age of 45 and now I feel happy about her because of some personal reasons.
First,she got married with a person whom she was in love with and they seem to be as a nice couple as they are.
Another reason is about my aunt's personality. She is such an independent person and thinks she have to be alone for whole of her life but sometimes you need someone to be with you in difficult and happy situations in your whole life, someone you can trust and share your feelings with,so, despite her strong opinion about being single in all her life she became convinced and felt that it is essential for humans to share their feelings with someone they like and make love with them.
The third one is about one of the greatest feelings of life which means to be a mother, and now I am happy for her because she is going to experience this beautiful feeling.
To summarize, stories and news affected our life, in a good or bad ways and if we know enough how to behave in a different situations, we can control and confront them in a most suitable way.
News and stories depend on their nature which is good or bad, can have an effect on our life.One of the new stories which has affected my life was my aunt's weeding.She finally got married at the age of 45 and now I feel happy about her because of some personal reasons.
First,she got married with a person whom she was in love with and they seem to be as a nice couple as they are.
Another reason is about my aunt's personality. She is such an independent person and thinks she have to be alone for whole of her life but sometimes you need someone to be with you in difficult and happy situations in your whole life, someone you can trust and share your feelings with,so, despite her strong opinion about being single in all her life she became convinced and felt that it is essential for humans to share their feelings with someone they like and make love with them.
The third one is about one of the greatest feelings of life which means to be a mother, and now I am happy for her because she is going to experience this beautiful feeling.
To summarize, stories and news affected our life, in a good or bad ways and if we know enough how to behave in a different situations, we can control and confront them in a most suitable way.
