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Posts by ALI ASADI
Joined: Jul 8, 2012
Last Post: Jul 11, 2012
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ALI ASADI   
Jul 11, 2012
Writing Feedback / Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in [2]

Ii is clear that, new knowledge is prerequisite successfully in future life. Some people believe that if there was possibility for teenagers to learn new knowledge in free time, they not dissemble this situation.

Some people think that partake in unpaid community in free time is very benefit for teenagers, because does it exist this possibility for them to learn some new knowledge and learn more information about future life and job. Moreover, when teenagers attend to unpaid community work, Expression this they follow your interest freely without any pressure, then they will be able get more information about their interest to find best way to be successful in future.

On the other hand some expert believes that attend to unpaid community work give not motivation to have responsibility about community work. They think that, if teenagers get money will be responsible to be precise and try to have more activity to earn good situation and much money. It goes without saying that, surely the number of favorite work will be decrease.

To sum up, I think unpaid community work in their free time is very useful, because is possible you select activity related with their interest, then is very useful for future life and you can find their negative point. But we not forget money give motivate for mostly to continue attend to each activity.
ALI ASADI   
Jul 10, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS; How technology has affected the types of relationships people make? [3]

introduction:
Toady new technology has become as indispensable part of my life and has affected a positive and negative on our relationship .

in first body write positive side and give a example as below:
today for new technology, people able to travel easily to each point very convenient ,because there are a lot of facilities for example plane,train and car .( And extend this paragraph).

in second body write negative side and give a example as below:
on the other hand , new technology keep most of people very busy and most of people don not have a lot of leisure time to keep contact with your family and friends.and extend this paragraph.

in conclusion give your opinion and restatement introduction and body.
ALI ASADI   
Jul 10, 2012
Writing Feedback / TOEFL ESSAY:In the future, students have the choice of studying at home by using tech [5]

Dear farzin_1875
in my opinion , It will be useful if you consider some note as below:
1- take a plane for one or two minute.
2-write a introduction that included fact and restatement rubric.
3- and write two or tree body and give an example in your body.
4- consider on paragraph for conclusion .
ALI ASADI   
Jul 8, 2012
Undergraduate / today most of the young children use mobile phone ,what is your opinion? [4]

The word is online.today young people need to learn some new technology such as computer,mobile and so on.because some new tools has become such as indispensable part of my life.

Some people believe that ,today young children need to protect by parent and know information about your pupil in school way and generally when their children are outdoor. because they think the society is not more safe today and when children have mobile they can make contact in short time with their parent and in emergency situation can easily contact for help,the parent have less stress when their children are in outdoor. And parent think that children should know and learn about new technology for future job and life,maybe is good way for children to learn responsibility in their future life.

On the other hand ,some expert believe that pupil need more concentrate and focus on their school and lesson,and think that when student are in school not necessary to have mobile phone ,because same new technology device such as mobile do distract pupil to read your assessment. they like to send new SMS and some new music and photo to each other and this type of activity take a lot of time.

to sum up i think that .it is better to parent have control on your children behavior for all of length of childhood life.Because today mobile phone such as another type of modern technology is very necessary tools and have many benefit such as responsibility and learn new knowledge for their future life.
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