Lao_hu
Dec 31, 2008
Undergraduate / Common App Short Answer ( City Links program) [7]
Dear all,
Thank you very much for your valuable suggestion. They are really helpful. I am still holding my own opinion. I think it looks fine overall due to my situation.
But I am not sure about the use of "absorb" and "consolidate" in the short answer. Do they cause any misunderstanding?
I have corrected it again. Does it look better? any confusion when you read it?
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience) (150 words or fewer)
I have been participating in a community service program called City Links for the past five months. We are able to serve the community while gaining internship and volunteer experience.
The internship I chose is with Manager Information Systems, which provides technical support to public offices throughout the city. I have absorbed various computer skills through this experience like how to diagnose problems, repair hardware and install systems.
For my City Links volunteer work, I am tutoring high school students in math and physics on weekends. Through this work, I am making new friends, consolidating my subject knowledge and improving my communication skills. Meanwhile, I have become more patient with and responsible to my students.
As an international student who came to America less than a year ago, joining City Links has provided me with opportunities to improve my English, overcome cultural barriers, and make valuable friendships.
Dear all,
Thank you very much for your valuable suggestion. They are really helpful. I am still holding my own opinion. I think it looks fine overall due to my situation.
But I am not sure about the use of "absorb" and "consolidate" in the short answer. Do they cause any misunderstanding?
I have corrected it again. Does it look better? any confusion when you read it?
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience) (150 words or fewer)
I have been participating in a community service program called City Links for the past five months. We are able to serve the community while gaining internship and volunteer experience.
The internship I chose is with Manager Information Systems, which provides technical support to public offices throughout the city. I have absorbed various computer skills through this experience like how to diagnose problems, repair hardware and install systems.
For my City Links volunteer work, I am tutoring high school students in math and physics on weekends. Through this work, I am making new friends, consolidating my subject knowledge and improving my communication skills. Meanwhile, I have become more patient with and responsible to my students.
As an international student who came to America less than a year ago, joining City Links has provided me with opportunities to improve my English, overcome cultural barriers, and make valuable friendships.