Iceecreami
Jul 29, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2 : Olympic Games not playing a role in 21st century? [4]
Thanks alot for the advice ^.^ it was really helpful
Thanks alot for the advice ^.^ it was really helpful
Iceecreami
Jul 26, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2 : Olympic Games not playing a role in 21st century? [4]
Hi , I am preparing myself for IELTS which is in 2 weeks time . Below is my essay and hope you could give feed back and what band the essay would be in . Thanks a lot in advance :)
Question : Some people think that the Olympic Games will not play a role in 21st century . TO what extend do you agree or disagree? 200-250 words
Since ancient times , the Olympic Games has been considered as an sport event for entertainment purposes. It has always been a legend , being passed on until today. Now, the Olympic Games is held every four years in different honoured countries , which are being selected as its hosts. I am in consummate discord with the above statement , for the Olympic Games is still obviously a much anticipated event throughout the world , which symbolizes integrity , sportsmanship and hard word.
In fact , the Olympic Games had brought athletes from different countries together and compete pacifically . For instance ,Palestine and Iraq was able to put down their personal conflicts and participated in the games . Not only that , the Olympic games had also helped its host in areas such a economy and fame. Being the host of the Games means that many jobs can be created for the citizens in construction and hospitality field . Furthermore , the game will also be followed closely over the world , and so its hosts.
However , there might be certain athletes who would take the Olympic Games too seriously , and showing much patriotism during the game . This can cause annoyance , misunderstanding and possibly conflicts between the countries , as it blatantly betrays the theme of sportsmanship and the idea of coming together as one .
In nutshell , I believe that the Olympic Games definitely plays more roles in the society today compared to the past. It now has a much greater impact on the world , than being just a form of entertainment alone.
Hi , I am preparing myself for IELTS which is in 2 weeks time . Below is my essay and hope you could give feed back and what band the essay would be in . Thanks a lot in advance :)
Question : Some people think that the Olympic Games will not play a role in 21st century . TO what extend do you agree or disagree? 200-250 words
Since ancient times , the Olympic Games has been considered as an sport event for entertainment purposes. It has always been a legend , being passed on until today. Now, the Olympic Games is held every four years in different honoured countries , which are being selected as its hosts. I am in consummate discord with the above statement , for the Olympic Games is still obviously a much anticipated event throughout the world , which symbolizes integrity , sportsmanship and hard word.
In fact , the Olympic Games had brought athletes from different countries together and compete pacifically . For instance ,Palestine and Iraq was able to put down their personal conflicts and participated in the games . Not only that , the Olympic games had also helped its host in areas such a economy and fame. Being the host of the Games means that many jobs can be created for the citizens in construction and hospitality field . Furthermore , the game will also be followed closely over the world , and so its hosts.
However , there might be certain athletes who would take the Olympic Games too seriously , and showing much patriotism during the game . This can cause annoyance , misunderstanding and possibly conflicts between the countries , as it blatantly betrays the theme of sportsmanship and the idea of coming together as one .
In nutshell , I believe that the Olympic Games definitely plays more roles in the society today compared to the past. It now has a much greater impact on the world , than being just a form of entertainment alone.
