Writing Feedback / IELTS; Is it worth spending on Animal protection? [2]

Now many people think that we are spending too much money and time on protecting wild animals. The money should be better spent on human population. Do you agree or disagree?

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In contemporary century, the endangerment and extinction of some species of wild animals have aroused citizens with sense of social responsibility. Some people hold strong support for the preservation of these animals, while others just think too much time and money have been consumed in this field. As for me, I am in favor of the former.

It should be made clear that funds for protecting wild animals can never be too much, since those animals can make money themselves. Since most of the endangered species are arranged in protected natural habitats, reserves and zoos, they can help to attract more tourists if they have chances to survive. Of course, certain amount of money is needed to be invested in this field, such as setting up reserves, hiring professionals, purchasing animal food as well as producing advertisement to raise public awareness of animal preservation.

On a further level, protecting precious wild animals , like giant pandas, rhinos and whales, contributes quite a lot to biodiversity. Scientists have testified that extinct species appear to disappear forever, even though technology tend to be rather advanced now. Unfortunately, the extinction of some species may bring about biological imbalance and other unknown problems. Thus, animal preservation deserves proper amount of time and money of our society.

Admittedly, human community is confronted with a host of pressing problems in other fields, including climate change, lack of healthcare, poor standards of living, in some regions worldwide. The governments and societies definitely should attach importance to these issues, as well as animal protection.

To conclude, it is advisable to allocate money and time to make sure that wild animals can prosper and live harmoniously with mankind.

Writing Feedback / IELTS：globalisation... hold demerits [2]

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Some people think the increasing business and cultural contact between countries brings many positive effects. Others say it causes the loss of national identities. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion.

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In this day and age, globalization in terms of business and culture is an irreversible trend. Some people insist that this trend would generate many benefits to countries involved, while others are concerned about the loss of national identities. From my perspective, both sides are reasonable.

Obviously, trade and cultural globalization contribute a lot to economic development and inter-understanding between countries respectively. With the diminishing barriers of importing and exporting consumer goods at an international level, companies can seek larger markets and purchase rare or cheaper goods abroad. Thus, resources worldwide are more likely to be reallocated and used more effectively, improving global economy. Another main benefit lies in more understanding between countries brought by frequent cultural interaction. To get to know an ethnic group, the best way may be learn their culture. Undoubtedly, now cultural communications render foreigners an access to know other groups.

However, to some extent, some countries' identities are fading, which is due to the loss of traditions and customs. In China, fast food restaurants, such as KFC and McDonald's, tend to be rather popular, especially among younger generation, while traditional Chinese food (like dumplings and noodles) can hardly appeal to an increasing number of people. Also, in present age celebrating Christmas Day is really a hot issue, not only for shopping malls, but for average households in cities.

Overall, globalization is one of greatest progress of human societies, though it does hold demerits. Personally, nations can seize the chances offered by this trend, but meanwhile governments and civics should place more value on the preservation of national identities.