Graduate / Physical Therapy: Characteristics you possess that would make an excellent PT [3]

I am applying to PT school and have a short essay that asks "Which personal characteristics and professional behaviors do you possess that will assist you to be come an excellent physial therapist?" The problem with this is that there is a 1200 character limit and I have having a very hard time trying to be able to thoroughly answer the question with such a length restraint. Here is what I have so far. The second paragraph and third paragraph are two separate options. I don't feel as though the second paragraph is complex enough whereas the third paragraph is too long. Any help would be greatly appreciated!! Thank you!

Multiple factors contribute to the successful outcome of therapy including proper technique, thorough education, and appropriate follow up by the client or patient. A therapist's personal characteristics may have an even larger impact. Interpersonal skills, patience, problem-solving skills, accountability and motivation are all essential for the physical therapy profession. Working as a Rehab Tech at Saint Mary's Hospital for the past year made me aware of both of my strong suits and shortcomings in the skills required.

As a tech, I have noticed I can communicate efficiently and easily with patients. I have been able to find different solutions to problems that arise within treatment. I have held patients accountable for performing at their maximum potential. Above all, I have learned patience is one of the most important characteristics to have. My amount of patience has increased dramatically since starting my job.

*(SECOND OPTION) In the winter of 2011, I was working with a patient with multiple sclerosis. The crippling disease overcame his body in a short amount of time, leaving him and his family stunned. Treatment after treatment, I saw vast improvements in his mobility. One afternoon, we told him we were going to try to stand. Discouraged, the patient repeated that he could not stand. I encouraged him and stayed positive telling him he could do it and we would be right by his side. After several attempts, the young man stood. I looked up to see tears streaming down his face and the words "I'm standing!" come out of his mouth. During this experience I used many of the skills an excellent therapist requires.