Writing Feedback / Thesis help: Education better or worse? [7]

I changed it a bit, but I think this is my final essay. I just have to write a conclusion. But could anyone help me edit what I have so far?

Thanks!

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Reforming America's Educational Values

The one thing that strikes me about the two generations is distinction in the lack of help from the government in our education system and how much school has culturally, ethnically, and racially diverse it has become. For nearly fifty years, the government has been under the impression that besieging students with homework will challenge them to think for themselves. Consequently, American kids have been less concerned with their homework and more fascinated with their Ipods.

I have attended both public school education and private school education in my life time, and the differences are unbelievable! During my time in private school, I felt a sense of understanding. Throughout the years I spent in public school, I was overwhelmed by the excessive amount of homework, the congested classrooms, in which I spent many hours, and the unsafe environment I had to study in. My public education was slighted.

Students today are growing up in a multimedia environment where technology surrounds us. All day long I hear phones buzzing, and radios that speak a foreign language I cannot interpret. I wonder how people made it in the past without cell phones or other high-tech necessities.

American schools are in crisis. I do not understand how we can live in a country full of riches and our education not is the top priority. I am really disappointed at our current leadership. Now-n-days, students are plagued with an onslaught of curriculum our government thinks is plausible. But this is the least of our worries.

In 2001, the No Child Left Behind act was signed into law by President George W. Bush. The law has created a scorn towards teachers. There is little room left to teach the proper way. This new law has forced teachers to coach students and teach them the basics so they can score high in order to obtain funds for their schools. And if they fail, so do the school.

It never cases to amazes me how much the government has humiliated and embarrassed young people for the entire world to see. The nature of school has changed dramatically in the past decade because of these laws. Many teachers and students are feeling betrayed by our government. Sure kids understand what writing is, but because of these laws, teachers are unable to teach their students how to put their thoughts on paper and make sense out of what they are trying to say.

Many parents will often cite the existing problems within our schools are because of the lack of help their children are receiving and are turning to an alternative means of educating their children. Home schooling is steadily becoming the number one choice for parents when it comes to education because the public school system is failing to meet their child's academic, individual, and handicap needs.

How did we get to this point? The answer is simple. It is because the government retains control over the public school system. They decide what type of content will be on our curriculum. Instead of taking two years of English, for instance, we are now forced to endure another two more. Nonetheless, I can not simply place our system; there are many factors to blame.

Students learn from modeling. Their models are programs on MTV. And the only foreign language they are being taught is the Music they listen to. When you ask a student what freedom means to them, they will answer Pepsi or Coke, Verizon or Cingular? Do you blog? This is pushing our children father and farther behind. It's absurd.

If we want to utilize the education system, we must cut back on how many external influences are taking in. Improving our schools does not begin by challenging out system, but rather challenging our kids. The pop culture children are growing up in today threatens to erode them from the very fundamental education that will help them become successful citizens later on in life.

Former President Clinton once said that "We" can make "America" better if we suspend our cynicism. Trusting in our government will only hurt us and our children. Our lives are made up of choices. Why not let our first ethical choice be for a better, school system for all of our children?

Writing Feedback / Thesis help: Education better or worse? [7]

I am still working and perfecting this essay, but would love some ideas or advice as to what other information I could add to it.

THanks!

Writing Feedback / Thesis help: Education better or worse? [7]

COuld anyone proofread my essay? It is suposed to be 750, but does it have to be?

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