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Posts by Malavika
Joined: Aug 21, 2012
Last Post: Aug 23, 2012
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Malavika   
Aug 23, 2012
Writing Feedback / IELTS-Gender Equality at WORK or preferences for certain gender? [4]

I thought that there are some mistakes in the above essay. I mentioned some of them below.

Men are supposed to be stronger than women in physical activities, while women have more patience for children that made them ideal carerscareers for kids.

It is universally believed, in the past, that people who could operate a plane are male.
Malavika   
Aug 22, 2012
Writing Feedback / People prefer to use their own transport nowadays [4]

I think the first sentence have some changes.

firstly I firmly believe that government should improve public transportation. Government should improve bus schedules because buses does not following arrival and departure timings.
Malavika   
Aug 22, 2012
Writing Feedback / Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. [3]

TOPIC:- Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Many people say that the death penalty must required to make our lives secure. But, some others argue that in the society death sentence is not necessary to counter the violence. However I am of the opinion that, it is better to forgive the sin, yield a counselling to him/her and give a chance to him/her to prove their change.

Now-a-days, the people are not getting fear by watching the death warrants. The most important reason for criminal activities is metal imbalance. So many people are there who does not balance their life in financial and family problems. By affording counselling, there is a chance to become offender to a normal person. Due to this reason the actual person will change and the others may start doing criminal activities. To avoid this, from the childhood onwards the parents and teachers should teach the children that how to live in the society, what to do for the society and what not to do etc.

For example, in the world, 51% of countries have abolished it, it for crimes committed in exceptional circumstances (such as in time of war) retain by 4% of countries where as 25% of countries permit its use for ordinary crimes, but have not used it for at least 10 years and are believed to have a policy or established practice of not carrying out executions, or it is under a moratorium but 21%of countries maintain the death penalty in both law and practice. And also, death penalty is outlawed in Australia, Netherlands, New Zealand, Germany, France, etc.

Therefore, persuaded by what has been discussed till now as well as compelled by what I have learnt and expressed, I would like to reiterate that due to the capital punishment the crime rate not coming to the end. The punishment without thinking is unfair. Then give a chance to the sinner to change himself. So, death penalty is not the only justice to decrease crime activities in the society.
Malavika   
Aug 21, 2012
Writing Feedback / People prefer to use their own transport nowadays [4]

Topic:-People prefer to use their own transport nowadays. What could society do to encourage people to use public transport?

Utilization of private transportation is one of the major problems that the world is facing today. If immediate and consequences and measures are not taken to tackle this problem, the consequences would be unimaginable. However, in order to find right remedies firstly, the real reasons must be unearthed.

There are several factors responsible for great usage of private transportation. The most important reason for this problem is, it is becoming like a passion. Mostly youngsters use their own vehicles to showoff. In the same vein, travel on private transportation is largely attributed to avoid the environmental effects. To escape from the sun powerful rays and the acid rains, People are using their own transportation to reach their exact destination. Daily, lacks of vehicles are bought by the people in the world.

But how can this problem be countered? Firstly, I firmly believe that, government should increase the public transportation. Why because people may not have time to wait for the government vehicles. And also, People can travel by having a seat. On the same lines, it is strongly recommended that government should hike the petrol and diesel prices, and also reduce the prices of public transportation. By this, utilization of private vehicles will decrease and prefer public transportation.

Unless concerted and war-footed efforts are made to address the malady of surge in private vehicles use, there will be more traffic jams and burgeon of global warming.
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