walterbb
Aug 27, 2012
Writing Feedback / Essay about National education in Hong Kong [3]
Hello! I am a student from Hong Kong. I desperately need someone's help to improve my writing skill. Thank you!
National education, which is now treated as a 'brainwashing' demon by a large group of citizens, seems to be introduced in a harsh way, and it is not likely to be stopped even if the earth exposes. However, the resistance for the curriculum is still noticeable. Pressures from protesting, newspapers and the internet accumulate, and now even students take part in the battle.
It was repeated again and again that the syllabus given by the government was unbalanced. It fail to touch on the dark side of our country, it contradicts with the iron law of learning and thinking, which emphasis the shape of opinions and opinions supported with solid facts. Thus, we conclude that the syllabus is immature, and it isn't ready for launching now.
It is strange that our government was doing so hard for achieving their goal, there are an advisory body for it, three years of preparation periods for it, as well as they will introduce it in governmental schools next month before asking for further feedback. Is it really worth doing? People may doubt that all those actions of the government is driven by specific political reasons, say to strengthen the nationalistic ideology of Hong Kong citizens as a "response" to the "order" of Central government, this results in fear of "brainwashing" which locks people away from the truth and freedom.
There are a lot of examples of national education in other countries. Many of them are successful and logical. For now, I firmly believe that the curriculum needs a pause for further consideration before it is thrown out.
Hello! I am a student from Hong Kong. I desperately need someone's help to improve my writing skill. Thank you!
National education, which is now treated as a 'brainwashing' demon by a large group of citizens, seems to be introduced in a harsh way, and it is not likely to be stopped even if the earth exposes. However, the resistance for the curriculum is still noticeable. Pressures from protesting, newspapers and the internet accumulate, and now even students take part in the battle.
It was repeated again and again that the syllabus given by the government was unbalanced. It fail to touch on the dark side of our country, it contradicts with the iron law of learning and thinking, which emphasis the shape of opinions and opinions supported with solid facts. Thus, we conclude that the syllabus is immature, and it isn't ready for launching now.
It is strange that our government was doing so hard for achieving their goal, there are an advisory body for it, three years of preparation periods for it, as well as they will introduce it in governmental schools next month before asking for further feedback. Is it really worth doing? People may doubt that all those actions of the government is driven by specific political reasons, say to strengthen the nationalistic ideology of Hong Kong citizens as a "response" to the "order" of Central government, this results in fear of "brainwashing" which locks people away from the truth and freedom.
There are a lot of examples of national education in other countries. Many of them are successful and logical. For now, I firmly believe that the curriculum needs a pause for further consideration before it is thrown out.
