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alooa95   
Aug 30, 2012
Undergraduate / DREXEL VIP application essay- Why I want to major in 'Still Deciding' science [4]

This is for the Drexel VIP application, and it must be 250-500 words. This essay is 500 words exact, but I would like it if you told me whether I answered the prompt well.

Prompt:A brief essay helps us get to know you. Please review what type of applicant you are and submit a corresponding essay of 250 to 500 words. You may write about why you are interested in your choice of major, or you may write on any subject you choose.

"So, what do you plan on studying in college, Aalaa?" Grandma asked.
I sighed. She wouldn't like it if I told her that I still haven't decided on a major. "Well, I still don't know yet, Grandma."

"What are you talking about?! Your almost a senior and you still don't know what you want to accomplish in your studies?!"

"Umm, I was thinking of majoring in-"
"You should be a doctor, just like your cousin Mohammad. He graduated with a PhD and now he works a lot and he earns a lot of money."

"But Grandma, you can't compare me to him! He loved what he was studying!"
"You need to study something that will make money. Just hear me out and become a doctor. You won't regret it!"
I don't really know about everyone else, but if you were a typical Arab teenager, I am pretty sure that you've experienced something like this. Having a relative forcing you to study whatever they think is good enough for you 'because it makes money' is common. I was always forced by relatives, not family, to consider majoring in anything connected to the medical field, but they never asked what I was interested in.

I was originally born in the United States and I lived there for 10 years. But then I moved to Dubai where I lived for 6 years, which also included my first two years of high school. The students around me all had an idea of what they wanted to be when they grow up from childhood. I, however, had no clue of what I wanted to be but I knew what my favorite subjects were and that would be mathematics. The college system in Dubai required that you must enter college with a major, or else it's no college for you. Therefore, I was forced to think of a major that I had to enter with. I finally decided to major in Computer Science, without really thinking whether this major was right for me.

When I returned to the United States last year in 2011, I still had the idea imprinted in my brain that I was to major in Computer Science. But after learning about college admissions in the U.S, I learned that I don't even have to enter college with a major in mind and that I could take various courses from different fields of study that could help me decided on the major that I want. From the moment I read this line, my whole brain was 'refreshed' from every single struggle that I had concerning with what I wanted to major. Now, I want to play the detective game of deciding which major is the right one for me at Drexel University. It would be an exciting case that I would love to solve. I mean, imagine me sitting in a Calculus 1 class while missing out an interesting sociology course. Therefore, I am willing to enter Drexel 'still-deciding' on a major.

Thank you!
alooa95   
Aug 30, 2012
Writing Feedback / Should High School be Extended for 1 Extra Year? [2]

As students progress further into high school, they will have to eventually deal with an enormous problem. Time. During Junior and Senior years, (they) would soon be avalanched by college applications...

That's the only mistake I noticed but great essay! :)
alooa95   
Aug 28, 2012
Undergraduate / "Why Software engineering?"- Drexel VIP short essay [2]

The essay prompt asks why i chose to major in software engineering at Drexel U.. 250-500 words..

I used to wonder why I was so interested in pursuing a major in Software engineering. To me, it was like an only choice major since I never wanted to pursue anything from the medical field nor anything humanities-related, plus mathematics was and will always be my favorite subject in school. Since Software engineering was all about math, I set my mind on pursuing it. But one day, I discovered something incredible about my Dad's side of the family that immediately had me thinking deeply about my major interest. After doing some research about Steve Jobs right after his death, I came to discover that Jobs' father by blood was really Syrian. His father's last name was 'Jandali' which is also my last name. At first I came to a conclusion that he was probably not really close to me in the family. But when I discussed this to my cousin, he immediately told me that Steve Job's real dad is actually my Dad's cousin. This meant that Steve Jobs is very close to me in relation. That piece of news made me extremely eager to read more about Steve Job's accomplishments with Apple Macintosh. But man, he's a genius. His recent inventions of the iPhone, iPod and iPads did create almost a huge revolution in the technology field. He once mentioned that every once in a while, a revolutionary product comes along and changes everything. After this discovery, I soon came to the conclusion that I wanted to walk Jobs' footsteps and accomplish the impossible that he had encountered in his life. By pursuing a major in Software engineering at Drexel University, I am confident that everyone would help me out in making this dream come true. And maybe someday I might be able to create software and programs that would change the world, just like Steve Jobs.

This is all 304 words.. Thank you!
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