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heroyi

Jan 11, 2009

Undergraduate / georgia tech essay (if delayed one year to go to school what would u do) [6]

About the essay...

thnx now that you brought it up, about the preposition, I did end sentences with the preposition words. I'm however a little confused about your statement on the two ideas being different and should combine them...but combine what (are you talking about the two paragraphs). In response I was thinking about just making a one body essay and just instead use the second paragraph into the first (since 2nd paragraph states reason why and 1st paragraph being about what i would do there).

about your perception...

i can understand your argument of making this more about my major (which is engineerin) however i dont think that the admission office is looking for a essay that describes how the major influences my life majorily. I think that the admission just want to know more about me (says my parent, friends, cousins and my intution lol). If the admission was interested in my major then the topic would be more like UF (how would your admission benefit the uf community). but as for this college believe it just wants to know me.

but...

now that your statement is making me paranoid (since I REALLY WANT TO GET INTO THIS COLLEGE) the other topic is "describe event in social, politic, etc... that shape who you are today." this i can agree with your viewpoint and can write a essay how when i was little and when i dissected my robot toy realizing i want to be a engineer. Should i just go with that then?

sry for being so long winded

heroyi

Jan 11, 2009

Undergraduate / georgia tech essay (if delayed one year to go to school what would u do) [6]

Hi so yea the topic says all (english is my weakest area thus i hate essays) this is the best i was able to conjure and edit so plz critique it. thanks in advance.

ps i think it is too short, if anyone else has any ideas on what i could elaborate or write more about pls say so. ( im REALLY REALLY REALLY interested in ga tech :) ) so yea thanks

due on tuesday

start going men

In the event that requires me to take a year off from school I choose to spend my time traveling South Korea. I choose to travel all around Korea to learn much of its culture and history that it left behind for the world to admire at. I would visit the duksoo palace (Lee dynasty palace, last dynasty in Korea) and memorial site of Korea's all-time national hero, my hero as well, Admiral Yi Sun Shin (equivalent to George Washington except defended Korea from foreign nation Japan). Not only do I wish to try some delicious food that is exclusive to only Korea like Sanche, but to experience snow for the first time of my life in Korea.

Also another reason I choose Korea to travel is to keep learning about my heritage that I know so little about.Although I was born in the United States of America and am a citizen, I'm a full blooded Korean also. Life was hard for me when I was young, not understanding english and going to American school when at that time my tongue spoke only Korean. I was soon forced to quickly adopt and adapt to the white man culture in order to be accepted by my peers and to suceed in the society I live in, however I couldn't celebrate my "achievement" because of my guilt for not embracing the culture that my parents instilled in me. What I hope to gain, aside from knowledge, is to redeem myself from my selfish act and to embrace my national heritage. By visiting this beautiful nation, I hope to enlighten myself of my culture's history and learn its trademark that it left for the world to respect. I hope to improve my linguistic knowledge as I travel on the soil of Korea so I can better communicate and understand my people's heritage, and I hope to make myself a better person and become a worthy representative of Korea in the United States of America.