amani3295
Oct 7, 2012
Undergraduate / FTIC Howard University Essay - What makes you, you. Your strengths and weaknesses. [2]
Hello,
I'm applying for the same thing! lol I love Howard University. Where did you find this prompt? Online on mine it said write 500 words "on a topic of your choice".
But here are my suggestions:
" I would like to write an essay about how hard my life was. " <--- I would change this to say: "I would have liked to write and essay about how hard my life was." I would do this because you wanted to, but actually didn't. I feel this is more grammatically correct. Also, especially since you follow with this: "However, my life wasn't all that hard." And maybe for this sentence you could tweak it to something like: "However, after reflection, I realized my life hasn't been as hard as I thought." or "However, I realized my life wasn't all that hard." I feel this would show more of how before this essay assignment you did in fact think your life was hard.
Also this: "What makes her stand out from the billions of other people in the world. " is a question, so it needs a question mark lol im sure it was just a typo.
I would also add more about how having independence and leadership is one of your strengths. Although I'm sure they would be thrilled to hear that you don't participate in using drugs or alcohol, I think you need more evidence (especially since you have enough characters left in order to do so).
Also, in the last paragraph I would add thoughts about Howard University. I would do this because if not whoever is reading your essay might think Howard is one of those plans and goals that you might reevaluate. I'm not saying they will, but when reviewing your essay, you should read it as though you are one of the admissions people deciding whether or not to admit you.
Sorry, I hope this wasn't harsh lol. I just love this school and I want everyone who really wants to be there to have the best possible chance. I will probably upload my FTIC Howard Essay on here too, so if you could advise mine to that would be great. I'm finishing it right now lol. Who knows, maybe I'll see you there. Good luck!
Hello,
I'm applying for the same thing! lol I love Howard University. Where did you find this prompt? Online on mine it said write 500 words "on a topic of your choice".
But here are my suggestions:
" I would like to write an essay about how hard my life was. " <--- I would change this to say: "I would have liked to write and essay about how hard my life was." I would do this because you wanted to, but actually didn't. I feel this is more grammatically correct. Also, especially since you follow with this: "However, my life wasn't all that hard." And maybe for this sentence you could tweak it to something like: "However, after reflection, I realized my life hasn't been as hard as I thought." or "However, I realized my life wasn't all that hard." I feel this would show more of how before this essay assignment you did in fact think your life was hard.
Also this: "What makes her stand out from the billions of other people in the world. " is a question, so it needs a question mark lol im sure it was just a typo.
I would also add more about how having independence and leadership is one of your strengths. Although I'm sure they would be thrilled to hear that you don't participate in using drugs or alcohol, I think you need more evidence (especially since you have enough characters left in order to do so).
Also, in the last paragraph I would add thoughts about Howard University. I would do this because if not whoever is reading your essay might think Howard is one of those plans and goals that you might reevaluate. I'm not saying they will, but when reviewing your essay, you should read it as though you are one of the admissions people deciding whether or not to admit you.
Sorry, I hope this wasn't harsh lol. I just love this school and I want everyone who really wants to be there to have the best possible chance. I will probably upload my FTIC Howard Essay on here too, so if you could advise mine to that would be great. I'm finishing it right now lol. Who knows, maybe I'll see you there. Good luck!
